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Mourning Death of Fallen Dreams
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Mourning Death of Fallen Dreams |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
shadows linger, gone lost within the light fading, melding, circling Drowning Deep, Mourning. dreams linger, die snared by the morn blending, swirling, losing Falling, Stars of Dreams. embers linger, breathe blurred within the flame failing, rising, burning Surpassing all, Living. hearts linger, live buried by the soul knowing, wishing, loving Surviving Ache, Hurting. For Carly, with my Love. “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
I hope Carly reads your tribute to her. It was very good, i liked the format of t the poem,keep on writing. Regina |
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Who iis she Junior Member
since 2002-05-14
Posts 41Some where over the rainbow |
Your poem is good. It was a little hard to follow to be honest but i thought it was good. Τ׺·. .·º ËriÇ康. .·º×¤Î |
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Who iis she Junior Member
since 2002-05-14
Posts 41Some where over the rainbow |
Your poem is good. It was a little hard to follow to be honest but i thought it was good. Τ׺·. .·º ËriÇ康. .·º×¤Î |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
Regina, Thanks for the compliments, I appreciate them. And yes Carly saw it. Miss seeing your work around dear. *hugs* Erica, It was meant to be a bit hard to follow. Love isn't always easy to follow Is it? ~tiff “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” I know Im not perfect but I can smile & I hope that you c this heart behind my tired eyes [This message has been edited by knightlyshadows (05-16-2002 07:09 PM).] |
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mistic Member
since 2001-05-06
Posts 233Idaho, U.S.A. |
very interesting format, thanks for sharing  Search too deeply and you might fall in. |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Yeah, Carly amoung other people---are missing from here as well...  |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
Eh...hehe. Sorry guys. ^_^; Tiffers! Glad to see another post! It almost seems as though the words "gone", "die", "breathe" and "live" don't need to be there as the poem flows well without them. However, it does give a nice effect when reading it outloud. ^_^ "Drowning Deep, Mourning. dreams linger"- I like the double meaning here. I would hate to critique this, as this is a tribute. I have to admit my mind has been corrupted by another poetry forum, so forgive me if I say anything that may be harsh. Thank you for posting again, Tiff! Talk to you soon! -Leah |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
I am so glad you showed this to her. It was really sweet and heartfelt. Nice job. ~Susie |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
Mistic, thanks for taking the time to read. Alex, long time no talk! *hugs* Yea, I miss seeing all the faces of PIP as well. I miss the days of teen4 but oh well. Thanks for bumping hun. Leah! *peck* I miss you soo much. I don't get the time to talk to you often anymore. *sniffles* Thanks for reading and replying honestly sweetie. I appreciate it. THe words 'gone', 'die', 'breathe', and 'live' are there to show the action of how love went. It left with 'gone' and died with uh 'died' of course o_O;, with 'breath' the person is able to move on with life, and 'live' is showing that they are living again as they should be. Sometimes the flowyness of a poem doesnt matter, to me atleast.  Love you hun. talk soon!Angel, thanks for the sweet reply. I'm glad I showed her as well. Thanks for reading, means tons. *hugs* thanks guys. “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” I know Im not perfect but I can smile & I hope that you c this heart behind my tired eyes [This message has been edited by knightlyshadows (05-21-2002 01:11 AM).] |
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