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Teen Poetry #5

Look at That Girl

CowgirlFreedom17
Member

since 2002-05-20

Posts 82
Mississippi

0 posted 2002-05-20 09:55 AM

Look at that girl.
She stands in the corner all alone.
I've heard her play continuos sad songs.
Look at that girl.
She lets the wind sweep her hair.
She sighs and looks at you with a blank stare.
Look at that girl.
A teardrop rolls down her cheek.
She silently stares at her feet.
Look at that girl.
What a pity.
What a shame.
Her hearts been broken, no pieces claimed.
Look at that girl.

Don't hold back the words you really mean.

Dunphy
Member

since 2002-03-14

Posts 82
Massachusetts USA

1 posted 2002-05-20 02:15 PM

welcome to passions it's a fun place to meet people and to express ur feelins you will feel warm and welcome. i enjoyed the read keep them posttin.
19 M Massachusetts
kevin jordan

CowgirlFreedom17
Member

since 2002-05-20

Posts 82
Mississippi

2 posted 2002-05-20 04:21 PM

Hey, thanks bunches! I love this place.

Don't hold back the words you really mean.

Cinderelly
Member

since 2001-12-31

Posts 189
NM, USA

3 posted 2002-05-20 07:33 PM

I really like this poem . . . The repeative-ness really works for it!

Life is a moderately good play w/ a badly written thrid act. - Unknown

Angel
Senior Member

since 1999-07-02

Posts 551
Pennsylvania

4 posted 2002-05-20 09:49 PM

I like the way you paint her as being a free spirit and then next thing I know she's really heartbroken...lonely, almost like an outcast. Now I'm rambling. Anyway, great read

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~Susie

CwboyAtHeart
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 541
Selah, WA, USA

5 posted 2002-05-21 12:33 PM

I really liked this one... Simple, yet it is so true and so meaningful. I think most people have felt like the girl at one point, feeling all alone after having their heart broken. Anywho... I liked this one, and it's cool to be seein' new people around here... Welcome!

      - Cody -

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bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

6 posted 2002-05-21 04:16 PM

That was beautiful.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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