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Something old, Something New, Something Borrowed, Something Blue |
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LCBS Senior Member
since 2001-11-29
Posts 532Connecticut |
Dressed all in white and painted happy She smoothed her "priceless" gown Fixed her smile to icy warmth Pushed all anxiety down She turned around to confront a mirror as tears fell down her face The reflection staring back at her Was haunted with her hearts disgrace She remembered a time of innocence God, it seemed so long ago When laughter came with painless ease Why did she have to go and grow? It seemed to happen all so quick In one instant it was gone Was she not a child just yesterday But all matured by today’s dawn Memories reeled in her mind Memories of days gone by Her first "this" and her last "that" Everything she failed when tried From little ribbons in her hair To endless self pollution From sweets dreams and happy thoughts To endless persecutions The music began it’s first chord And she placed her foot into the church As her father took her arm Her stomach gave one final lurch Maybe this would solve her problems One step closer to the altar Maybe she could learn to love him Never let her mask falter Smile fixed in her endless guilt Wasn’t this her "special day" She closed her eyes and said "I do" Let her spirit get washed away Dressed all in white and painted mourning she faced her fears at last Fixed her smile to warming ice let her insides harass |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
Lisa, this was great. I loved it. You wrote this so well, I think it's one of my favs from you. It really means something to me. I especially liked these contrasting lines: 'Dressed all in white and painted happy' and 'Dressed all in white and painted mourning.' This is going to my library. Keep em comin. .:tiff:. “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” I know Im not perfect but I can smile & I hope that you c this heart behind my tired eyes [This message has been edited by knightlyshadows (05-13-2002 03:46 PM).] |
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skyshine 
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
This is excellently done, Lisa. You told this story very well. I'm keeping this one for sure!  ~sky I'm in charge, and I say question authority! |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This was an incredible poem!! I felt so many different emotions while reading this. You did an amazing job on this!! LOVED IT!! iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf.. |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Yeah, wow, I liked this a lot. It flowed very, very well. I can almost relate with that woman, but I can't ever imagine marrying someone I didn't love, I'm just not the type.  Jenn Why is it that we are at our most ingenius only when trying to destroy the things that keep us alive and thriving? |
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Who iis she Junior Member
since 2002-05-14
Posts 41Some where over the rainbow |
I thought this was very well written. By the tittle i thought it was to be dumb but it is great! Τ׺·. .·º ËriÇ康. .·º×¤Î |
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Mon Cherie
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
Lisa, I honestly think this is very well written. You've expressed very well the feelings in the few minutes it takes for the bride to reach the altar. *sigh* Who said growing up is easy? I'm in the beginning stage of adulthood, and I can never stop looking back at the times when I can lead a carefree life, with few responsibilities, and lots of time to play. _,,,^.^,,,_ |
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