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Teen Poetry #5

Lost Again

Allysa

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since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

0 posted 2002-05-03 09:06 AM

You pass me in the hallway
climbing over my back
as I lean forward
slamming down my last card
to win the game.
You tap me on my head
and I lean back
pinning your legs to the wall
as you smile
and I'm lost again.

kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

1 posted 2002-05-05 09:35 PM

cool!..i'm interpreting "lost" in two ways...firstly, the author is lost in her friend's wonderful smile...secondly, the competitive author lost the game again...

Mon Cherie

Senior Member

since 2001-10-31

Posts 922
Land of Never-ending Summers

2 posted 2002-05-06 12:37 PM

i think she lost her heart as well... =)

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Florence

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

3 posted 2002-05-06 01:43 PM

I liked it a lot allysa!! short and sweet and to the point!! thanks for sharing

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

4 posted 2002-05-08 09:53 AM

hmmmmm very interesting
very though tprovoking poem Allysa
this is really good
I'll get back to you on this
thanks for sharing

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?
Nelly Furtado é a menina a mais bonita no mundo largo do todo.

Jenn Cirrincione

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since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

5 posted 2002-05-08 12:47 PM

Hmmm... I really have mixed emotion on the final words. Lost is this feeling that just carries you away, and it's so great. And yet, it's so scary and you lose control of yourself. It's hard isn't it?

Nice write...
Jenn

"I can't get you out of my head- your love is all I think about."

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