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0 posted 2002-04-24 02:57 AM



A vague grasp
of what you are.
Not entirely sure
how to explain
all you mean.
You bring me joy,
peace at Your words,
joy at Your sight.
Always longing
to know You more;
calling Your name
simply because
then I smile.

4/16/02

© Copyright 2002 Daniel Redding - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-04-24 12:41 PM


With the capital letters it's almost as you're speaking of God. However, I think that maybe it could also be more simplisticly read as a friend or lover who has bewildered you and captured your attention.

Nice one.
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2 posted 2002-04-26 12:25 PM


Aww this was such a sweet poem Ti. Your feelings for this person was well presented here and it had a lot of emotion in it Great job hun..i liked this one a lot!

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

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3 posted 2002-04-26 05:41 PM


Very nice poem Titus! Short and to the point. Often the best way to present a feeling.
It reminded me of some of my friendships... some of the good ones, and one of the twisted ones... actually, there was only one twisted one. Anyway, it was beautiful. So much for the theory that nostalgia is something you do when you're too old to remember the bad stuff.

*drifts off into reverie*

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4 posted 2002-04-27 08:02 PM


Thanks everyone.

And Jenn.... it's whatever you want it to be.

Sincerely,
Titus

Every second that passes you are one second older. You'll never get that second back.

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5 posted 2002-04-28 11:34 PM




(smiles) Awwwwww, I know just how you feel, sweet friend, I love my dream girl so much and I always yearn each day to know more about her and when she comes on-line, I can't wait to hear what she has to say! (big hugggssssss) May time bring you and your sweetheart together and may you find true happiness to last forever, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Daniel, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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6 posted 2002-04-28 11:43 PM


Thanks man.

\Titus

Every second that passes you are one second older. You'll never get that second back.

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7 posted 2002-04-29 12:46 PM




What did I GET from it? Peace.
What did it DO to me? Um... made me smile
How did it MOVE me? Well, I didn't click the back button

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8 posted 2002-04-29 01:22 AM


I liked it a lot. I prefer shorter poems in general because long, drawn out poems test my ability to sit still, which isn't very long.

That's right, I ate your fries.

[This message has been edited by Dark Enchantress (04-29-2002 01:24 AM).]

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