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PurplePeopleEater
Junior Member

since 2002-01-04

Posts 11

0 posted 2002-04-10 09:48 PM

i wrote this while i was bored in science so its probably not that good. oh well, ill post it anyway.

Naturally Down

Once again I’m not good enough
Just to stomp on me and tell me it’s tough
I can’t take it anymore
What is all of this for?
You took all of my pride away
When are you going to get your day?

I never felt like this before
This is my heart beaten and tore
Like my entire self has been taken away from me
This pain will never set me free

Sleeping to survive
It’s taken all my pride
This is the price I have to pay
When are you going to get your day?

Painless when?
Will this ever end?
I am now faded away
When are you going to get your day?

knightlyshadows
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 791
obscured vision

1 posted 2002-04-16 01:25 AM

This was a nice write PPE, even if it was written in science class.

I thought it was pretty good as a whole, but I liked this stanza the best:
I never felt like this before
This is my heart beaten and tore
Like my entire self has been taken away from me
This pain will never set me free
Loved the title for this. Keep em coming.
..tiff..

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

I know Im not perfect but I can smile
& I hope that you c this heart behind my tired eyes

[This message has been edited by knightlyshadows (04-16-2002 01:26 AM).]

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

2 posted 2002-04-16 01:42 PM

WOw...this was really really good. I can relate to this a lot....amazing job and thanks for sharing!

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

fearing-laughter
Senior Member

since 2001-04-24

Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)

3 posted 2002-04-28 05:52 PM

hey danimonkey,
sorry i haven't gotten around to replying to all your poems, i feel sorta bad..anywayz this one was great as usual. you are really talented, and i am glad you are my friend. *smiles* see ya in hell on monday.
-bergie wee-wee-

maybe i'll catch fire, something nice to warm me. something pure to burn away the darkness, that hides inside my mind. -alkaline trio-

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