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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
There were some horses galloping on by with no one to ride and some ivy twirling around in the bedroom all alone and it reminds me of your smell I would like to stay here like a ghost, he says I'm like a ghost - and I would stay here and give you kisses in the evening like a good wife should but I am untame and a forest thing, so my hips you will bruise but keep them not, you will lose to the horses galloping on by looking for someone to ride "I never claimed to be your savior I said I had a dirty mouth Stop analyzing my behavior If you’re too dumb to work it out" Garbage [This message has been edited by Dark Enchantress (04-08-2002 07:40 PM).] |
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PoetryIsLife 
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
 I love the idea of the horses, riding by... perhaps they are a new fascination, perhaps they are a new train of thought.... there is always something new to ride, if you're looking for it. Far too often we let the horses ride by, do we not? "and a forest thing, so my hips you will bruise but keep them not, you will lose to the horses galloping on by looking for someone to ride" You love of new things overpowers the love you have, no? The last three lines, I love in particular.  Galloping is such a vivid word. Another great one, Memina. Oh, before I forget, did you mean to type "Untamed" or "untame"?~ Mon Verite "Tesous Christos, Theou Uios, Soter" |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
I mean "untame". I was describing myself, not him or the situation that might have had a taming effect on me but didn't. The ideas actually came from his home. There's horses nearby, ivy in his bedroom, and when I was walking through the house one night his father said that I'm like a ghost. "I never claimed to be your savior I said I had a dirty mouth Stop analyzing my behavior If you’re too dumb to work it out" Garbage [This message has been edited by Dark Enchantress (04-08-2002 08:57 PM).] |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Great poem  really enjoyed reading it!! iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf.. |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
~and give you kisses in the evening like a good wife should but I am untame and a forest thing, so my hips you will bruise but keep them not, you will lose to the horses galloping on by looking for someone to ride~ Reminds me of the Pink song... "Can't take me home to momma cause she wouldn't think I proper...should've thought about that before you....with me.." This is really good... I'm loving your work. Jenn "I can't get you out of my head- your love is all I think about." |
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BrokenAngel Member
since 2002-01-06
Posts 141Puryear, TN, USA |
I love how you used horses in this one(I love horses!!) Really good way to describe the way you feel inside. Wonderful work!! ~*~*~Night Angel~*~*~ |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
You've portrayed a very clear picture here. The ties between everything were presented really well, too...Made me think. It was much enjoyed. ~Carly "Feelings are not supposed to be logical. Dangerous is the man who has rationalized his emotions." |
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