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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
you used to push and shove against the thick walls surrounding my heart and you smiled in triumph when they finally gave way and fell apart but then you realized that what was behind them wasn't what you were expecting at all... behind the walls was a child who was scared and alone and i saw your eyes widden in fear as you gazed into my soul -bergundy- maybe i'll catch fire, something nice to warm me. something pure to burn away the darkness, that hides inside my mind. -alkaline trio- [This message has been edited by fearing-laughter (04-06-2002 10:30 PM).] |
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PoetryIsLife 
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Oh, wow. Deep. I liked the way you used the idea of the walls.... it made the poem very clear in my mind's eye. Splendidly done.  ~ Titus "Tesous Christos, Theou Uios, Soter" |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Oooooh I like...You warn them not to get too close, then it happens, and they're afraid of what they see...Quite a well-expressed piece. ~Carly "Feelings are not supposed to be logical. Dangerous is the man who has rationalized his emotions." |
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