Teen Poetry #5 |
Life Afta Death |
Dunphy Member
since 2002-03-14
Posts 82Massachusetts USA |
when i must leave for awhile please don't greive an shed wild tears an hug ur sorrow to you through tha years, But stawt out bravely wit a gllant snile: An fo my sake an in my namelive awn in life an do everythin tha same, feed nawt your loneliness awn empty dayz, But fill each weakin houa useful wayz, Reach out your hand in comfort an in cheer an i inturn will comfort you an hold you near An neva, neva be afraid to die, For i am waittin for you in hta heavens skies LOVE KEVIN REID (AKA) DUNPHY 18 MALE MASSACHUSETTS |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
this poem would be truly inspiring if you would spell the words correctly, I got a headache trying to figure out the words. Not trying to be mean here, I promise, because the poem is wonderful, but it would be a thousand times better if you spelled words right |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
sea it's his style and it's awesome i love it hehe so good hun i love that last line so cute. love ya! i am me don't tell me different!! |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
LoL it is is true..it is his style!!! One of a kind dunphy style hehe...and i love you for that boy!! Great write...truly emotional. Your poems keep getting betta! iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf.. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
ummmmmm.....ok I mean, if it's your style then cool for you all I'm saying is the spelling....ya know? I like what you have to say though |
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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA |
I totally agree with Sea. Great message, well written... But the spelling throws me off. I s'pose it's all good, tho, It's just hard for me to read. Then again, could be where I live n' da kinda person I am. lol Anyway, nice write. - Cody - |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Quite interesting. Where in Mass are you from? Sounds like Outkast...but ... not Bel |
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BrokenAngel Member
since 2002-01-06
Posts 141Puryear, TN, USA |
Wow, even with the way you spelled the words, it's still a wonderful peice. Love the style you have. Keep up the good work!! ---Night Angel |
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Dunphy Member
since 2002-03-14
Posts 82Massachusetts USA |
isabel i would like to know where you from if you don't mind tellin me. now you gotts me cerious. |
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