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Dunphy
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0 posted 2002-04-08 09:54 AM


when i must leave for awhile please don't greive
an shed wild tears an hug ur sorrow to you
through tha years, But stawt out bravely wit a
gllant snile: An fo my sake an in my namelive awn
in life an do everythin tha same, feed nawt your
loneliness awn empty dayz, But fill each weakin
houa useful wayz, Reach out your hand in comfort
an in cheer an i inturn will comfort you an hold you near
An neva, neva be afraid to die,
For i am waittin for you in hta heavens skies

                   LOVE KEVIN REID
                   (AKA)   DUNPHY
                   18  MALE MASSACHUSETTS

© Copyright 2002 Kevin Reid - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-04-08 10:03 AM


this poem would be truly inspiring if you would spell the words correctly, I got a headache trying to figure out the words. Not trying to be mean here, I promise, because the poem is wonderful, but it would be a thousand times better if you spelled words right
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2 posted 2002-04-08 12:59 PM


sea it's his style and it's awesome i love it hehe so good hun i love that last line so cute. love ya!

i am me don't tell me different!!
JEFF IS ONE HOT STUD *RAWR*
i want him *DROOLZ*
dam hes hott!!!

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3 posted 2002-04-08 01:38 PM


LoL it is is true..it is his style!!! One of a kind dunphy style hehe...and i love you for that boy!! Great write...truly emotional. Your poems keep getting betta!

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

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4 posted 2002-04-08 01:41 PM


ummmmmm.....ok I mean, if it's your style then cool for you all I'm saying is the spelling....ya know? I like what you have to say though
CwboyAtHeart
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5 posted 2002-04-08 01:48 PM


I totally agree with Sea.  Great message, well written...  But the spelling throws me off.  I s'pose it's all good, tho, It's just hard for me to read.  Then again, could be where I live n' da kinda person I am.  lol  Anyway, nice write.

      - Cody -

Note To Self:  If Pigs Can Fly, So Can I!!!

If someboy laughs at me, does that make me funny or just plain stupid?  

Isabel Galaxia
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6 posted 2002-04-08 06:12 PM


Quite interesting.  
Where in Mass are you from?
Sounds like Outkast...but ... not
Bel

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7 posted 2002-04-08 06:31 PM


Wow, even with the way you spelled the words, it's still a wonderful peice.  Love the style you have.  Keep up the good work!!

---Night Angel

Dunphy
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8 posted 2002-04-09 02:45 PM


isabel i would like to know where you from if you don't mind tellin me. now you gotts me cerious.

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