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nikki813
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0 posted 2002-04-06 12:00 PM



He holds me as i sleep
content in his arms
moonlight on his face
i catch him looking

breath-like sighs
escape his lips
soft kiss on his shoulder
the night is short

fingers trace my every curve
"your beautiful" he says
and i am
he makes me that way

lips against my own
rought but yet soft
the kiss envelops me
capturing my mind

will something come of this?
who's to say
but right now i'm happy
this is my bliss

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1 posted 2002-04-06 12:19 PM


sounds like a beautiful moment nicely done
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2 posted 2002-04-06 08:20 PM


This is lovely - a soft, beautiful moment in time.
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3 posted 2002-04-06 09:22 PM


Its amazing how people can make us feel isnt it?? Your beautiful not because he makes you that way though hun and you should know that!! Your beautiful without him ...great write!!

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

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4 posted 2002-04-08 07:13 PM


Normally I hate poetry revolving around love (because normally it's insincere and impersonal), but I really did enjoy this poem. I WAS sincere and personal and simple... like the moment you were describing.

Thanks for posting

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I said I had a dirty mouth
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5 posted 2002-04-08 07:58 PM


*grins*

     

I love it.   A very sweet write... very sweet.  These lines in particular:

"lips against my own
rought but yet soft
the kiss envelops me
capturing my mind"

And the last two lines.... good poetry.  

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"Tesous Christos, Theou Uios, Soter"

[This message has been edited by PoetryIsLife (04-08-2002 07:59 PM).]

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6 posted 2002-04-08 08:50 PM


this poem was awesome. i would give anything to feel one second of this. if you have found that one to make you feel like that then you are so much better off than half this world cuz many of us are in search of this very thing u have. great write. i'll be reading all ur poems from now on!

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Dunphy
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7 posted 2002-04-09 06:07 PM


you know love is a strange thang you know.
don'tk nowwhat iss gonna happin next you
cryin then you laghin. then one time you get a kiss who knows when then next time you miss
is really a phenomenon you neva know when it will be commin awn you gotta make that special kiss long. you know iss an experience juss like life.

love kevin reid
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18 M Cape Cod Massachusetts

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