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corey14 Member
since 2001-05-23
Posts 89Boston, Mass, U.S.A. |
you dont care but maybe you do i dont know cause we never talk i want to cry when im not near you not knowing what to say yet words will never be enough one chance to ask some day waiting for my heart to be shatered wanting to just go away i love you that is all i can say |
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SEA 
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Corey, this touches my heart.... well done  |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Very good...sometimes all you CAN say is "I love you"...good job!  |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Just three little words that say so much. Sometimes when words are lost on you, the only thing you can say is, "I love you" probably because it's the only kind of sense you can gather from the situation. There have been many times when I had no idea what to say... I just knew what I felt. I really enjoyed this poem. It showed clearly in it's form (whether it was intentional or not) how utterly confusing and distressing that kind of situation is. Thank you for posting this. DE "I never claimed to be your savior |
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quietlydying
since 2001-06-10
Posts 935the wonderful land of oz |
it's very honest, and to the point. but could we maybe see a little punctuation? i think it would be a nice touch. /jen/ so foul and fair a day i have not seen. - macbeth act 1, scene 3 |
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