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Voiceless
Senior Member

since 2001-02-19

Posts 686
Under the stars upon the wind

0 posted 2002-03-30 01:15 AM

I told myself I couldn't..
But of course I did.
I really knew I shouldn't..
But who was I to kid?

I started down a path.
I already know where it will end.
I think of it everytime we laugh.
For soon we will reach the bend.

I want to hold on forever.
The problem is do you?
I keep saying never say never.
But that just wouldn't be true..

How do I take the fall,
without ever landing?
You name I want to call,
but yet I remain silently standing.

I am trapped in confusion.
Do you care?
Is this just an illusion?
Life just isn't fair.

For now I can't say it.
So I'll write it instead.
The pieces have begun to fit.
I am scared the outcome you may dread.

For you I am falling.
Can't you tell?
Nevermind I stalling,
I already fell.

( Hey everyone, I haven't written anything in awhile
but I needed to write something about this, because
well i am crazy about him, who knows with him though)

Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial)

punkrockerrobin

Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 1180
Sparks, NV

1 posted 2002-03-30 01:55 AM

girl if he ain't gonna love you for you ten kick him to the curb!

i am me don't tell me different!!
JEFF IS ONE HOT STUD *RAWR*
i want him *DROOLZ*
dam hes hott!!!

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

2 posted 2002-03-30 11:28 AM

Awesome write and nice to see you writing again!!! Loved the poem..keep up the great work!

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

katherine
Member

since 2000-06-10

Posts 365
Canberra Australia

3 posted 2002-03-31 06:50 AM

this is really good. good luck with it all and if he hasn't fallen make him!

Voiceless
Senior Member

since 2001-02-19

Posts 686
Under the stars upon the wind

4 posted 2002-03-31 04:22 PM

Well the question now is,
do I give it to him?
I am extremely nervous,
what do you guys think?
Thank's for the replies I really
appreciate it.

Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial)

LCBS
Senior Member

since 2001-11-29

Posts 532
Connecticut

5 posted 2002-03-31 08:02 PM

For you I am falling.
Can't you tell?
Nevermind I stalling,
I already fell.
OOO I loved that stanza...great job voiceless, I enjoyed this thoroughly!!

Great Job!

~Lisa

Voiceless
Senior Member

since 2001-02-19

Posts 686
Under the stars upon the wind

6 posted 2002-03-31 11:19 PM

Well I sent it to him..
Now I am just really nervous..
Thanks again!

Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial)

PoetryIsLife

Senior Member

since 2001-10-27

Posts 1763
...in my boxers...

7 posted 2002-04-01 04:30 PM

Very impressive!

Nice flow, nice stanza's and shape, form, et all. Loved the ending:

"For you I am falling.
Can't you tell?
Nevermind I'm stalling,
I already fell."

Superb ending. Very splendid.

Love is risk.... without taking chances you'll never get rewards. But with risk comes... risk of pain, hurt, et all. Indeed.

How are things going? Did he respond?

~ Titus

"My body is merely the canvas of my soul."
~ The Night Owl

the reign of chaos
New Member

since 2002-06-23

Posts 6

8 posted 2003-02-03 11:05 PM

you have me baby, always and forever

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