Teen Poetry #5 |
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Growing Up and Breaking Down |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC ![]() |
A child attempting to fill a man's shoes I paid the price but had no dues Feeling the pressure of adult responsibility Before I had the ability to create my own identity Had to deal with too much at an early age Pissed away childhood by feeding on rage I seen too much, done too much Left me with instinct as my only crutch Too damn young to have a messed up life 13 years old, contemplating the knife Confused and complacent Victim of misplacement Wrong place at the wrong time Sentenced but no crime A young mind born of the emotions it knows Felt hate, anger, pain, as it grows and grows and grows A prime example of a lost cause Being eaten by depression as it closes its jaws So I locked myself away in a state of dillusion 13 years old and already abusin' I could use some help but I don't know how to ask No one sees my disentigration hidden behind this mask A fall from grace is something I would never taste I never got high enough to reach that place More like a loss of bliss Carefree childhood is something I missed Now I'm stuck seeing life always from the downside I'm stuck hating myself, a mental suicide Afraid of life, let me be sent to the grave 13 years old, and too late to be saved Hey guys, just wanted to let you know that I kinda looked back a few years to write this one. I am completely fine. I just fed off the emotions I remembered feeling to write this. [This message has been edited by keoni (03-24-2002 04:51 PM).] |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
wow, i liked this, i dunno wut else 2 say. ![]() ~If u luv something, let it go,if it comes back 2 u, its urs, if it doesnt, it never wuz..~DMX |
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quietlydying![]() ![]()
since 2001-06-10
Posts 935the wonderful land of oz |
i really enjoyed this piece. probably because i spent the majority of my adolescence [starting at thirteen] fighting a major recurring depression [as well as other things]. thanks for writing it. /jen/ so foul and fair a day i have not seen. - macbeth act 1, scene 3 |
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LCBS Senior Member
since 2001-11-29
Posts 532Connecticut |
I have this feeling that you are reading my mind...Sometimes i feel this way too, unfortunatly, you may have gotten out a few years ago, but I am in this adolesence right now, and it sucks.. Awesome right! ~Lisa |
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since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
A VERY strong a emotional piece. You wrote this with a lot of feeling and you did a great job. Wonderful poem and i hope that things get better for you ![]() iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf.. |
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