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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA ![]() |
You say that My words And my life Clash That I'm just another {edit} cliche And my tears Are bitter Yet sweet So perhaps you wouldn't mind If I offered you Another bittersweet glass of lemonade That my soul produced Just for the likes of you I'll add more sugar If you so desire Or perhaps watch your face wither As your body is Slowly attacked by the bitterness Of my true raw emotions Next time You'll watch what you say And next time I'll just spit in your face And throw you back Where you {edit} belong [This message has been edited by Ceinwyn (03-23-2002 11:03 AM).] |
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PoetryIsLife![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Whoa, Kristen, POWERFUL. Very strong, and biter. Enjoyed. ![]() *walks off to email kristen* ~ Titus "My body is merely the canvas of my soul." |
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LCBS Senior Member
since 2001-11-29
Posts 532Connecticut |
Kris! Wow, I love the metaphor, and I loved the poem....email or get online, we'll talk ~Lisa |
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quietlydying![]() ![]()
since 2001-06-10
Posts 935the wonderful land of oz |
very emotional. i do like. /jen/ so foul and fair a day i have not seen. - macbeth act 1, scene 3 |
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Skyfire![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
"And next time I'll just spit in your face" Woohoo! Way to tell it like it is! Wow. Raw, powerful, and well-written. Thanks for that refreshing read; haven't read something that bitter in quite a bit in here! I'm sorry that you were screwed over like that... Don't need 'im anyway! Hopelessly in love |
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Starr Member
since 2001-02-08
Posts 100 |
Really powerful... Could honestly feel it.. Good write here... However sorry for your pain ![]() Hope you cheer up Misty (not name just a nick) Every action of our lives touches some chord that will vibrate in eternity. |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Yeah! That's what I'm talking about. This one kicked ass. Very strong, I loved it Jon "Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur |
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