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Teen Poetry #5

a conclusion of sorts

GOlDsparklESS
Member

since 2001-12-13

Posts 428
central nj

0 posted 2002-03-21 11:39 PM

disappointment
you know what it means?
its what happens when you appoint an expectation
to someone you shouldn't
(like whoa)
dis-allusion when the truth comes out
i thought you were a real man
but i was wrong
and now i'm let down
but
i'll be fine
as soon as
POOF!

the smoke clears...

LCBS
Senior Member

since 2001-11-29

Posts 532
Connecticut

1 posted 2002-03-22 03:26 PM

Wow...this was a great write...

I loved all the things it said, with very little words (does that make sense???)

~Lisa

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

2 posted 2002-03-27 06:15 PM

Great poem!! Im waiting for the smoke to clear on a lotta things and im starting to wonder if its even smoke at all!! Good job

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

Child of the Stars

Senior Member

since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

3 posted 2002-04-10 10:33 AM

Ha! Loved this. Lighthearted yet...well, not. Depends on how it's read.
I like your style.

~Carly

"Feelings are not supposed to be logical. Dangerous is the man who has rationalized his emotions."
~David Borenstein

EagleScorpion
Senior Member

since 2000-03-08

Posts 1644
Here, Now, Forever

4 posted 2002-05-28 09:44 PM

YAY!! i think you will be alright... even while the smokes still there!! enjoy the smoke while it lasts!!! you may miss it at a later juncture

FEAR NOT DEATH,
IT IS THE MOST BEAUTIFUL THING THAT WILL EVER HAPPEN TO YOU

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2002-05-30 08:03 AM

Very creative, very well done. I liked this poem a lot. It's these kind of poems that impress me when I come in here. Keep posting.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

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