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laconic
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0 posted 2002-03-12 06:43 AM



My breath of life, gave me new insight
to see through the lies before mine eyes
my breath of life changed my world
now i know how my lifes contured
my breath of life became it all
my breath of life, i give to ya'all

The first philosophy spoken through word
is release, where all is possible, nothing obsured
the second that came
is nothings the same,
never compare, so your never compared
always fix yourself, before the world you repair
Philosophy three, learned from the days
is that i debt is collected, but a favor repaid
so never heed mind about being kind
one who helps others is never behind
and that leads us, to philosophy four
the poor are the rich, and the rich are the poor
to live in flith is to have a heart of gold
through adversity we build oppertunity
a truth rarely exposed
and that concludes our session today
so take out your lunches children
go out and play.

© Copyright 2002 Luke Zhang - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-03-12 01:43 PM


really nice i like much.

i am me don't tell me different!!
JEFF IS ONE HOT STUD *RAWR*
i want him *DROOLZ*
dam hes hott!!!

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2 posted 2002-03-12 04:24 PM


I like it! Made me think. Thanks for the read!

I want to die peacefully, in my sleep, like my grandfather, not screaming, terrified, like his passengers.

cherish
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swimming in fairy floss...........
3 posted 2002-03-13 04:41 AM


"never compare, so your never compared"
i didnt like that line...only cuz i know that even though you as a person wouldnt compare yourself to anything or anyone nor would you nessesarily compare anyone else to anyone or thing,  other people will always compare you to them or them to you or someone else.  but i liked the following line:
"always fix yourself, before the world you repair" cuz i think that that is true...if you ARE going to compare, then you had better see that you're "fixed" before saying anything.
i liked the read, im glad to know that there are ppl out there who do have their own philosophies to live by...i know i do

Zombie

Torn are her limbs
By quiet hands that
Tug life(color) out of her.
Gnawing edges round
Into a broken(satisfying)
Shadow

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