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xEmperorEmber
Member

since 2000-03-28

Posts 136
tx

0 posted 2002-03-11 02:37 AM

becoming increasingly more difficult to please
to make me sound
to keep my feet on this ground
these desperate pleas for reflection
met by struggles of the opposition
with no definition for this
incredible appetite for addiction
on the simple things i crave
whose complexities grow
with the introduction of
every new fissure
till i make myself hollow with
wrinkling spirals
of inevitable nothing
pacing their distance out
within my skull
working toward their own
cataclysmic departure
by way of their
miscalculations
tempting me to go
further and test the limits of isolation
till
this
deafening
silence
is
my
only
friend withstand the torture of unraveling
these decadent three sixty twists within myself
and deciphering the complexity
of a mind judged by the mind
where the complexity resides
until i trap my self in a never ending cycle
feeding off myself like sick parasite
to host to parasite and back again
with my only guide being a black hole
intuition with the greed of self
recognition
decisions
decisions
decisions
step into my shadow and back again

...With my feet up on the ground i lose myself between the sounds and open wide to suck it in i feel it move across my skin....

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

1 posted 2002-03-11 07:49 AM

whoa...amazing job!!! your words were strong and powerful. Great job!!!

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

xEmperorEmber
Member

since 2000-03-28

Posts 136
tx

2 posted 2002-03-11 11:53 AM

Thank you i am glad that you enjoyed the read.

-Queth-
Junior Member

since 2002-02-10

Posts 35
Canada

3 posted 2002-03-11 08:37 PM

-xEmperorEmber-

I am very impressed with your work so far! You have such a strong way of writing, and some of the vocabulary here is outstanding! I especially liked the way you formed the one-word lines. Spiffy. -smiles-

The piece seemed to just carry itself, there was no need to push it. I really enjoyed this poem! I can't wait to see your next post! -smiles-

Q.u.e.t.h.

Everything in between.

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

4 posted 2002-03-13 04:54 AM

oh wow...again youve managed to totally captivate me and blow my mind away with your poetry. i love the imagery and the vividness of this all. you write VERY well indeed...i loved the repetition and the varied sentence length- they really gave to the poem. i really hope youre proud of this piece, cuz you wrote it very well.

Zombie

Torn are her limbs
By quiet hands that
Tug life(color) out of her.
Gnawing edges round
Into a broken(satisfying)
Shadow

Dark Enchantress
Senior Member

since 1999-07-27

Posts 1258
meet Morgana

5 posted 2002-03-16 01:44 AM

You suck, Paul.

No, I loved it (surprise, surprise). I love your style, your message, your depth, your truth... everything. When I grow up, I want to be like you.

"That's right, I ate your fries."

Love,
Jaime

-- the calm before the storm --

La vie est plus belle quand on l'ecrit soi-meme.

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