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Demonic Illusion
Member

since 2002-02-07

Posts 50

0 posted 2002-03-05 11:24 AM

Everyday's not the same,
Another body without a name.
Laying cold on the sidewalk,
Draw over you with a piece of chalk.
Stake your claim on fame,
Kill the dame in shame.
Another demonic feeling,
This life you're dealing.
Strike once and in veign,
One more soul to be sleign.
They adore what a bore,
Turned me around once more.
Turned around by the fire in your eye,
For you I will live and die.
Owe you my life,
Took away my bloody knife.
I see Heaven when I look in your eyes,
Seeing deep in your sould and no lies.
I'll meet death before I let you be harmed,
Saw your gorgeous smile and was instantly charmed.
Feel your touch every night in bed,
You're always running through my head.
Life of suffering for the ones who hurt you,
Keeping you happy is what I intend to do.
You took and held on to my heart,
I let you have it from the start.
Nothng in this world I wouldn't do,
To get a smile out of you.
Lost and found,
You turned me around.
My angel and my love,
Definately sent from above.
Whoever hurts you shall fall,
Have no fear none at all.
Easily turned around three words.
I'm addicted to you,
Death and dishonor to all your foes,
Anyone want to contest?
And play The Game....

Lisa_bebe15
Member

since 2001-11-15

Posts 151
Florida

1 posted 2002-03-05 12:09 PM

Thats really nice..I really like it..I thought it was a little long..but Its really good..keep working!

"Water Over Matter"

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

2 posted 2002-03-05 05:13 PM

Wow...amazing piece Demonic!! I really enjoyed it! You words were strong and your feelings really went into this poem...great job!

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

Android 17

Senior Member

since 2001-07-21

Posts 664
Winnipeg

3 posted 2002-03-05 09:34 PM

Hey, this is pretty darned good! At first it sounded like a dark poem...but all's well ends well!

Others are too in love with the sound of their own voice to speak the truth...

Dark Enchantress
Senior Member

since 1999-07-27

Posts 1258
meet Morgana

4 posted 2002-03-06 08:09 AM

I agree with the others. Your poems was strong in it's message, which was delivered in a clear yet very deep form. Thank you for posting this.

DE

laconic
Member

since 2002-02-17

Posts 64
Melbourne, Australia

5 posted 2002-03-06 08:49 AM

This was good... but take the rap out of it if ur posting poetry, or just post a verse. Mixing both just dont seem to work. only my opinion tho

Demonic Illusion
Member

since 2002-02-07

Posts 50

6 posted 2002-03-06 11:46 AM

then you read it wrong...rap isnt contained in it its a before and now type thing of how my gf flipped me around

Demonic Illusions, Frostic Dragons, Bloody Tears From Me To You....all surround by a force of Untouchable Darkness

DawnG

Senior Member

since 2000-06-23

Posts 1494
United States

7 posted 2002-03-06 01:16 PM

Awesome piece!

Dawn

ForeverMyOwn
Junior Member

since 2001-11-23

Posts 13
Brighton, MI

8 posted 2002-03-06 08:16 PM

Hey man, that ruled, dont want to mess with whomever this is about.

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