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laconic
Member

since 2002-02-17

Posts 64
Melbourne, Australia

0 posted 2002-03-04 06:58 AM

death
a single syllable uttered by a single idiot
not to be taken lightly though is it?
its because of death that many fear life
amidst all the strife we strive to survive
but lose sight of what we're surviving for
its precisely this fact that I'm trying to bring forth
we make a living by what we earn;
we make a life by what we give
let that sink in
how does it feel?
changed your perspective about what's real?
living like death ain't a threat is hard to do
especially for those who down in the blues
but hold your head up and glance at the sky
how can something so bright be hoping you die
never fear the call of the reaper
he's just doing his job trying to get by
Life after death ain't as harsh as it seems
we all go through it
so it's kinda like puberty, know what I mean.

my inspiration has drained like perspiration ..again i'm empty like hemp i been smoked dry...*sigh*

anonymousfemale
Member Elite

since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

1 posted 2002-03-04 07:38 AM

You know those signs that say "Santa, please stop by my house tonight"? I've got one that says, "Death, please stop by my house tonight".

Now seriously, this is an awesome piece. Very philosophical and quite honest which is good to see. Your finishing lines are really strong and the little bit of humour really adds to it.

I enjoyed the read quite a bit and it's been added to my library. Thank you for sharing this.

~AF~

::Most people never listen::
Ernest Hemingway

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

2 posted 2002-03-04 01:40 PM

Great piece Iaconic!! really enjoyed it!!

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

LCBS
Senior Member

since 2001-11-29

Posts 532
Connecticut

3 posted 2002-03-04 03:06 PM

I really like what this poem portrays. It angers me when people fear death, and when people fear an afterlife. A friend of mine is scared of the word "eternity" and what it means. I welcome eternity....I cherish it...Great poem!

~LCBS

Android 17

Senior Member

since 2001-07-21

Posts 664
Winnipeg

4 posted 2002-03-04 08:01 PM

This has a chilling, realistic feel to it! nice! Although I think that ryhming mighta helped...(Pfft, that's what I always say!) And the last few lines are simple, yet SOOO true! I like them...I like them alot! It's definetly something I'll remember!

Others are too in love with the sound of their own voice to speak the truth...

TopGunLauren
Senior Member

since 2000-08-02

Posts 718
California

5 posted 2002-03-05 01:18 AM

Wow....awsome piece I really like it.
Lauren

laconic
Member

since 2002-02-17

Posts 64
Melbourne, Australia

6 posted 2002-03-05 06:22 AM

quote:
This has a chilling, realistic feel to it! nice! Although I think that ryhming mighta helped...(Pfft, that's what I always say!) And the last few lines are simple, yet SOOO true! I like them...I like them alot! It's definetly something I'll remember!

thanks man.. but like.. it did rhyme didnt it?
hehe..."death please stop at my house tonite"

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