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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA 
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Tell me, honestly what do you think this is about? it should be interesting to find out what you think..*hugs* Screams Piercing through the night Unbarable Dreams Holding on for dear life Vicitimized Again, torn apart From emotions Ripped from the warm womb Found deep within a restless soul The stalker The culprit Lurks Within the shadows Of the mind And at times True peace is hard to find When you've finally grown blind From all the deception And the pain That has been chasing you For what seems like a lifetime... |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
Wow, this was amazing. I especially liked the last few lines, they were very powerful. Nicely done! |
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LCBS Senior Member
since 2001-11-29
Posts 532Connecticut |
"When you've finally grown blind From all the deception And the pain That has been chasing you For what seems like a lifetime..." Kris, is painfully truthful, and shows your raw emotion, its one of the best I have ever read, because it is truly what your heart is feeling, and nothing can top true emotions...email me...we'll talk ~Lisa Exeryone makes mistake, learn from them and move on, because tomorrow we'll make more... |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Wow...amazing job!! You put so much emotion into it and your words hit right at home with me. ::hugs:: i hope one day you can overcome the feeling of eternity iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf.. |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
*kirt nod* Some might call it morbid, and dark..but I think your poem was well written! I enjoyed it! I say you should keep this genre up, maybe even expand on it! Others are too in love with the sound of their own voice to speak the truth... [This message has been edited by Android 17 (03-02-2002 06:57 PM).] |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
It's interesting I'll give you that much. I'm torn between what it could mean but that'll come to me the more I read it. I do like it though. It's well written which is always nice to see. One spelling error in there really annoyed me. It should be unbearable, not unbarable.  Thanks for sharing. ~AF~ ::Most people never listen:: |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Wow, Kris. Spendid job on this one. Dark, and disturbing, which to me, is harder to do. When writing dark, you have to really tell the emotions your feeling realy show them, so as to not confused. A fast read, a biting read. I for one loved it. Dreams are precious, indeed. But when ripped from us, the pain is at times devestating.  I'm emailing you in a moment. Oh, these lines: Ripped from the warm womb Found deep within a restless soul Whoa! And the ending! Another whoa. Props to you, baby. ~ Titus The One, The Only... The Titus. |
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