Teen Poetry #5 |
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Lost inside my head |
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Allysa![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden ![]() |
You make my hands tremble my voice shakes when I talk to you I pull the covers over my head and in the backround you strum on your guitar. You make me wonder about you weither this is true or not weither you're true or not as you sit there and listen and strum on your guitar. All the things I want to say to you are lost when you're right next to me all the things I have to tell you are lost inside my mind, lost inside my head. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
you are growing and growing with your poetry Allysa That is one thing I've noticed recently I thought the poem may use another stanza But all in all, I loved it ps. Hope its not Nitsuj ![]() là où est mon amour? |
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since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
You expressed your feelings very well Allysa...nicely done ![]() iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf.. |
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Allysa![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
No, this is about Mike, not Justin. Mike is the guy I've mentioned before. (Saturday stuff) |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
Nitsuj ...LOL! ...very well done allysa...i liked this one...'specially the strumming part ![]() Zombie |
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Jenabou Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 215Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA |
This was absolutly wonderful I too have been in a situation much like this. Very well done *for someone who's used to heartache,losing it all was just a matter of time* |
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