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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA 
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Full moon rising Coursing through your veins Teetering between Shere madness Trying to control your affections Perfectionist, plain and simple Won't you allow me To sing you a sweet lullabye To ease the tensions that control your mind Are you afraid Of what you might find? Sweet emotion Hiding within the recesses of your soul Please dont be afraid To let go Of all the creatures Caged up within that dark abyss Longing for a simple friendship laced kiss... [This message has been edited by Ceinwyn (02-21-2002 06:19 PM).] |
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PoetryIsLife 
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
"Are you afraid Of what you might find?" How true!  "Longing for a simple friendship laced kiss..." What a beautiful line! Another great one.  Sincerely, The Titus The One, The Only... The Titus. |
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Lisa_bebe15 Member
since 2001-11-15
Posts 151Florida |
thats good...I wish I could write like that!! "Water Over Matter" |
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Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
Absolutely incredible..flowed really nicely. I agree that the last line is a beautiful end to an amazing poem. Keep writing! The day you were born, you were born free |
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gracianna Member
since 2002-02-17
Posts 165A 14 year hell |
wow....just...wow....  I give a whole new meaning to the word 'sad.' |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This poem flowed very nicely Ceinwyn...nicely done and keep em coming! mE & cHrIsTiNe GaVe A WhOlE nEw mEaNiNg tO ThE wOrD "iNcOgNiTo" |
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LCBS Senior Member
since 2001-11-29
Posts 532Connecticut |
I love the metaphors you use in your writing, you have great imagery. I too am a perfectionist, and it sucks! Great poem! ~LCBS Exeryone makes mistake, learn from them and move on, because tomorrow we'll make more... |
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