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tzaddiqim Junior Member
since 2002-02-14
Posts 15 |
Stop staring at me With those long full eyes Of happiness lost I hate u More than anybody I now Then how do I love u so? It hurts my soul So long and so sort we lived as one But now we are two I am still a half You hate me I don't regret what we had You gave me so much And I gave to It’s hard Why does love hurt? Why does it make me cry? You hate me I’m so lonely No one likes me I lived fro you What should I live fro now You made me happy I know you don’t But it feels that way All the things we could have done We said we'd do All that I miss in you All that I have left Why now? Why is it so hard not to love you? I see you everywhere Two became one and all that is mine was yours All that I have reminds me of you I can’t escape Why do you hate me? Why can’t we be together? Is it so hard? My soul hurts My heart is dead Or bleeding So close I feel cold How I long for you warm embrace To warm me We went through so much We had so much You hate me |
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Deep_Inside Member
since 2002-02-14
Posts 377i can't stop hiding |
the emotions of loseing a love it's hard i know when you find what you think is true love the feelings linger for years. i really felt the hert in this one |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
Welcome! It always hurts when a connection of love is broken and replaced by hate you express your emotions well and get the point accross with your poem. Keep it up! Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial) |
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-Queth- Junior Member
since 2002-02-10
Posts 35Canada |
This is one of the most bitter poems I've ever read, and I'm sorry you're feeling this way. It's never right for someone to hate, or to be hated, but we're only human, and so we should also forgive. Love hurts, I'm sure almost everyone will understand that, but hurting will heal. This poem almost expresses the pure nature of hate, which was very strong here. You're hating, the other is hating, makes me wonder if two hates would cancel each other out? -smile- Don't mind me... I thought the replacement of "you" for the letter "u" didn't give the second stanza enough. {I hate u More than anybody I now Then how do I love u so? It hurts my soul}- The "u" almost seems like you don't really mean it, yet for the other stanzas, you use the word "you" rather than "u". I was just wondering if this was intentional...-smile- Nothing big. Other than that, big welcomes to PIP! -grin- I hope to see more from you later on! Q.u.e.t.h. Everything in between... |
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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This was such a strong piece....and of course... WELCOME TO PASSIONS!! I really enjoyed this a lot..im sorry to hear that you 2 are no longer together but i know what your talking about how you love someone no matter wat amount of pain they cause u... P.S.- check ur e-mail for a special greeting mE & cHrIsTiNe GaVe A WhOlE nEw mEaNiNg tO ThE wOrD "iNcOgNiTo" |
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tzaddiqim Junior Member
since 2002-02-14
Posts 15 |
thanx everyone for the comments and the welcomes, sorry about the bad typing, but i wrote it quickly, hence the high emotions! Brett, |
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