Teen Poetry #5 |
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The Game |
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Cinderelly Member
since 2001-12-31
Posts 189NM, USA |
"The Game" - a poem told by the point of both people (starting w/ the guy, then the girl, etc.) and ending in their mutual final thought. Please offer any suggestions! ROARING crowd, RUNNING feet, TONIGHT, it’s all about the game. OUT of my way, JUST to see you, TONIGHT, I’m thinking "What would happen if you knew?" AHEAD by ten, GOING to state, CAN’T let them win NOT now, not ever. DON’T care about the score, NOT important to me, HE’S already won my heart B/C what has been, ALWAYS will be . . . WON the game, AM a star, WHO is that staring from afar? BASKING in his pride, WILL I ever break his stride? ARE my feelings something to always hide? SHE’S nothing but a friend, MY heart’s being occupied, NO space for her to reside. 4 years, WE’VE known, BUT when will we be more? MORE then we’ve been before. |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
wow jamie, i really liked the way you wrote this- VERY creative indeed..i love the way it read like a game and the whole "game" aspect of it. very cute piece of poetry you have here. i liked it loads. ![]() ![]() life's not about who wins or loses, or about whos got the better car,or the most money. it's about living,and trying to make the best of what we have. |
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aaron woodside Member
since 2001-09-26
Posts 256 |
The way this is set up is very original. I liked this piece and I think you could make it even better by expanding on your ideas a little more instaed of limiting them to such short little "in-game thoughts". It was a nice write though. Enjoyed it much ex animo, Aaron There are no great men, only men in great circumstances. |
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since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Really interesting format...i like it a lot!!! I love how it was a story told by both sides..great poem! mE & cHrIsTiNe GaVe A WhOlE nEw mEaNiNg tO ThE wOrD "iNcOgNiTo" |
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chas Member
since 2001-04-08
Posts 101Lynn, ma |
a poem of an epic struggle..great work.. interesting poem.. enjoyed it alot. |
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