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vixengrl04
Member

since 2001-04-26

Posts 495
East Haddam, CT

0 posted 2002-02-13 09:49 PM

I haven't posted in a long time, so sorry. I've been so busy. But anyway, Valentine's Day brings back so many memories, grrr...

memories flood my mind
like a harsh downfall that just won’t cease
splattering
pitter-pattering
drowning me,
till I’ve lost my breath
How much longer can I hold it?
I close my eyes to find relief
and all I see is you
and me
one year ago
though it feels like an eternity
I still hear the words you said,
I still feel your touch,
I still think about you,
I still want you.
But you’re
not mine
not mine
not mine
You’re gone,
and all that remains
are the memories
Like a rainstorm in my mind.
And when it rains,
it pours.

~*Nikki*~

     *~Fighting for your love~*
    *~Is something I cannot do~*
   *~I'm not good enough to win~*
*~And I'm not strong enough to lose~*

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

1 posted 2002-02-13 09:54 PM

I relate...well, what i've been feeling lately this would be it...

"I still think about you,
I still want you.
But you’re
not mine
not mine
not mine
You’re gone,
and all that remains
are the memories" The power in those verses hit me; *points to chest*

"Dont piss me off, Im runing out of places to hide the bodies..."

aaron woodside
Member

since 2001-09-26

Posts 256

2 posted 2002-02-15 03:59 AM

I liked the idea of hearing and feeling the other person even though they are not around.

The use of rain as a comparision worked very well with how these emotions just seem to crop up and explode into our lives after so long. Just rememeber, it can't rain forever.

ex animo,
Aaron

There are no great men, only men in great circumstances.

StarDust
New Member

since 2001-11-25

Posts 1
Waterford CT

3 posted 2002-02-15 09:44 PM

This one hits home! I can relate to this one alot! Great write!

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

4 posted 2002-02-15 11:16 PM

"How much longer can I hold it?
I close my eyes to find relief
and all I see is you
and me"

ahhh, relating here....I love this poem!

DancinQueen

Senior Member

since 2000-07-29

Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA

5 posted 2002-02-16 02:39 AM

for some odd reason, the last 2 lines just stuck with me. not like ive never heard them before bc theyre very common...but it just ended your poem very nice and crisply.if thats a word?? i'll just webster check it out. but neways, great job

*dq

**You can't always trust the people you want to**

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