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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733
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I had to use Papa Roach to help with the first part. If you want to get all pissy and delete it, I can't stop you. The one line that's taken is "Would it be wrong would it be right." If that's plagiarism then well go ahead and say I'm a horrible writer who has to steal others' work because they cannot write their own. Say whatever you want; say what's on your mind. Impress me, surprise me, enlighten me. I really don't care. Shred my life to pieces. This is my confession. Suffocate me, I can't breathe, Don't give a - if inside I'm bleeding. Would it be wrong would it be right- If I bared it all tonight, Don't I have the right? Listed up because I might, I'm contemplating telling all I'm losing my health, losing my mind Not one of you can tell me I'm fine. Look at my tattered body, Now tell me I'm fine. Look at my aching body, Have the nerve to say its alright. There's a secret within me, Tell me you didn't suspect. There's a lie I'm telling, You can't see through it. But I'm losing my health, losing my mind Now have the nerve to tell me I'm fine. There's a reason I look this way, Something behind my eyes There's a reason I act like this, Dwells in me deep inside. Deny the obvious. Assumed innocence blinding you. Believing the careful disguise. Losing my health, losing my mind Now have the nerve to tell me I'm fine, losing my health, losing my mind Now have the nerve to tell me I'm fine. I'm A N O R E X I C You helped make me this way, Tell me I'm al-RIGHT . [This message has been edited by Isabel Galaxia (02-06-2002 05:20 PM).] |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Oh wow! Majorly powerful piece, Bel. Isn't it amazing what some people contribute to ana? They say you're fine, that there's nothing wrong with you until your lying down dead...ha! I loved it and I'm sorry that people are doing this to you. Anytime you want to talk, email me: [email protected]. I'm sure we connect in more ways than one. Take care of yourself and thanks for sharing. ~AF~ If this is all the world has to offer, I want a refund on my life. |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
Woah. This one really hit home. People are so ignorant, telling you and themselves that you are fine even if they are the ones making you worse. If you ever need to talk, email me at [email protected]. Beautiful poem! I always enjoy your work. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Wow...this completely hit home..i delt with anorexia at the age of 12 so i can relate...::hugs:: strong piece! mE & cHrIsTiNe GaVe A WhOlE nEw mEaNiNg tO ThE wOrD "iNcOgNiTo" |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Can't say that I relate...Food has always been a close guarded friend of mine...However I was greatly blown away by your poem.  Impressed doesn't even begin to describe it... I liked the style of it...This would make for one kick arse rock song in my little head... I'm adding this piece to the library... More please.  Share Jesa, Stroke Jesa, Pet Jesa, Love Jesa. |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
WOAH!  ...i cant relate but i sure can feel!...powerful words Isa...very powerful indeed! -just acknowledge the part you got off papa roach..and you'll be fine  Zombie |
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