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Skyfire

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since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

0 posted 2002-01-30 12:22 PM

You held me last night
All night long
I woke up missing you
But knew I hadn't been wrong
You hold my love, my soul, my mind
In the palm of your hand
If I seem skittish and paranoid
You must understand
The last time I loved
I was painfully burned
He sent me an email
Said "I'm done with you"
I'm terrified that one of these days
I'll get one of those from you too
So if I need reminding
What you feel for me
It's because of my story
And because to my heart, only you hold the key

Ugh. I know the rhyming sucks royally, but it's 9:00 in the morning right now... give me a break. Usually my poetry is written late at night... that's why it's alwasy so stellar Just had to get something cleared up is all...

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Poet Unknown
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 140
Missouri

1 posted 2002-01-30 01:28 PM

this was excellent

Do as you please....strike forth down upon your knees...Darkness Falls on Those Without Souls

PoetryIsLife

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since 2001-10-27

Posts 1763
...in my boxers...

2 posted 2002-01-30 03:47 PM

Nicely done.

Titus

Naustious From The Ups And Downs Of This Earthly Existence.

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

3 posted 2002-01-30 05:16 PM

I thought this was a really good poem reguardless of whatever time you decided to write it!!

BoOsH bOoSh nApoLE

Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

4 posted 2002-01-30 05:30 PM

A wonderful poem, especially for 9:00 am

*hugs*

Andrew says:
*your so cute*
Skyfire says:
Cute?????? Oh, okay. But only from you

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

5 posted 2002-01-31 11:03 AM

This was very well done... it's always good to have an emotional thought-dump in the form of a poem.

--Marie

I wish your fingers could touch all I can't say... no one should ever feel this alone.

rubberband
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since 2002-01-04

Posts 26
Will be half Swiss one day

6 posted 2002-02-02 04:00 PM

That is so sweeeeeeeeet!

Put your past behind you, not you past in front of you!

Android 17

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since 2001-07-21

Posts 664
Winnipeg

7 posted 2002-02-05 11:31 AM

PoL#2...for 9:00am---this is great. Hey...peotry needs no time, nor place, nor age! You write it...and I find that you say what you feel the more tired you are---because well...you're not quite awake and you don't realize that you're letting something slip out. Teh-heh...I know that one for a fact!

But, nonetheless...I liked this poem! It got the message across---and I'm sure your guy won't do the same! I pity him if he did!!! (and hit him over the head with a bamboo stick)

Others are too in love with the sound of their own voice to speak the truth...

Erin
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since 2000-06-15

Posts 2527
~Chicago~

8 posted 2002-02-09 05:57 AM

I agree with Adroid...You dont need a specific time to wite...You did a great job getting the point across...

If you want something very badly, set it free. If it comes back to you, its yours forever, if it doesnt, it was never yours to begin with"

cherish
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since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

9 posted 2002-02-09 06:03 AM

i like this. its open and honest and serves its purpose well. i like the fact that you can use a poem to convey something which you would otherwise not be able to communicate. thanks for sharing this rhonnie...i enjoyed the read muchly

life's not about who wins or loses, or about whos got the better car,or the most money. it's about living,and trying to make the best of what we have.

Devils Angel 666
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since 2001-11-30

Posts 71
CT, USA

10 posted 2002-02-10 02:34 PM

I agree with everyone but I also find that my best poetry (although I've been told is getting better with each poem) is done best when real late at night to the point where I don't remember writing it. That is often my best work because my mind is focused on nothing else but that topic to the point where I think that both minds are working on it.
Great write
~Dan

DawnG

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since 2000-06-23

Posts 1494
United States

11 posted 2002-02-10 03:00 PM

Skyfyre,

This is a really great poem. Doesn't matter what time of day you write, I always love your poetry.

Dawn

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