Teen Poetry #5 |
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Die Nacht der langen Messer |
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Marshalzu![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking ![]() |
Die Nacht der langen Messer (Night of the Long Knives) Long knives Reach deep in the night Mass revolution ends with Bloody purge Blades of mistrust Deceit and paranoia Blood r u n s so freely Loyalty is bought On the blades of mistrust Legal procedings of Puppets on strings. The silence is more beautiful than you will ever know |
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prov1717 Member
since 2001-12-26
Posts 74NE |
hey, nice work, i liked the format. keep it up.....i like your work. |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
This is so interesting. How you set it up was kicking! I like the message, the imagery, and all around the poem. It makes you think and we all know I love those! Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial) |
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Tamma![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV |
Gotta admit, the title caught my eye...(is it German? I'm probably wrong, but thats the feel i got from it). Anywayz...I liked this poem...Keep it up !! ~ Tamma If I held a star everytyme |
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Marshalzu![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Thank you for all your replies and yes it is a german title ![]() Join the Imperial Space and Navy and become a Ti(tus) fighter. ;) |
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Fading Away![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Wow, very nice analogy, Zu. When I saw the title, I was afraid this was another poem in a language I don't understand. I think you just like tricking me ![]() As usual, your format intrigued me. I love the creative formats like this, it really puts spice into the poem, and adds a kick that wouldn't have been there before. I enjoyed this, as always, and I look forward to reading more ![]() --Marie "It was a long December, but there's reason to believe that maybe this year will be better than the last." (Counting Crows) |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
YAY ZU!!! ^_^ I really like the way you formatted "runs". That was neat. ^_^ It added more than just words to the poem. Great stuff! ++ Leah ++ Va pensiero sull' ali dorate... |
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anonymous albert ?![]()
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
About the title? lol. well, I liked how you wrote this...The format added more to which; To me were quite RAW imagery...caught my attention was the verse, "Puppets on strings." ...makes me think of some things. Anyways...well done, AndZu. ^_^ "Dont piss me off. Im runing out of places to hide the bodies." [This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (02-06-2002 02:21 AM).] |
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PoetryIsLife![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Zu, my friend, what can I say other then superbly done? I love it, as usual. ![]() The Titus Let the music set you free. |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
....i cant believe i missed this. reading it again ive come to the same conclusions- youre an awesome writer...and will always be. write some more quickly!! life's not about who wins or loses, or about whos got the better car,or the most money. it's about living,and trying to make the best of what we have. |
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Devils Angel 666 Member
since 2001-11-30
Posts 71CT, USA |
I gree with all that everyone has said here.... I especialy love the formatt and teh imagry that it produces for me Great write ~Dan |
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