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Crooked Halos - A Success For the Court
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Crooked Halos - A Success For the Court |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
They stand him up before the judge, Shackles on his wrists, A defiant grin upon his lips; Through the loop he twists. She sits there on the other side, Her eyes locked on his face, Fighting to speak of the things That she’s tried to erase. The jury listens while she tells The story of that night, They listen while she tells them Why she didn’t fight. She tells them of the knife he held, And tears stream down her cheeks, She tells them of the things he said, And of his looks and peeks. When she’s told her story, His lawyers plead their case, They twist her words and tell their lies, Her story they deface. Though she tries to prove them wrong, The judge silences the court, He flashes her a devilish grin, As the truth they soon distort. The jury’s made its verdict, They’re letting him go loose, Twelve months in a prison, Is all he gets for his abuse. She begs and begs for an appeal, They tell her to go home, That they’ll keep an eye on him, And not let him free to roam. In a year they let him out, Not thinking that he’d shed blood, Two weeks later they find her body, Lying in the mud. --------------- Inspired by a movie I saw today, and by some real life events that have happened to friends of mine. -Adam "If life is so significant, then why do we die?" |
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LCBS Senior Member
since 2001-11-29
Posts 532Connecticut |
Another great poem....but I thought I told you to write something uplifting! Keep them coming they are great to read! LCBS I was drowning in my own tears, until you threw me a life preserver |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
Uplifting? Bah.....get me some anti-depressants, and we'll talk. :P -Adam "If life is so significant, then why do we die?" |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
Woah, this was very powerful stuff, and unfortunately, an all too common subject. You portrayed so much, and didnt even seem restricted by your rhyming scheme. I find that hard to do. Great job! |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Well done, Adam. Titus Let the music set you free. |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
powerful but great, awesome job Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial) |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
WAOH!!! Dude...from what I read---you gripped onto me...threw me around and kicked my butt! All in on peice! DUDE...this was powerful---it's not the average everyday ending! I thought the ending would be happy and bubbly...and that's where I thought it'd suffer---but with what you showed my...my faith has been restored! DUDE---YOU'RE MY NEW GOD!!! LMAO jk Others are too in love with the sound of their own voice to speak the truth... |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Alex...  The Titus Let the music set you free. |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
wow, i liked this alot. very deep. great write   ~If u luv something, let it go,if it comes back 2 u, its urs, if it doesnt, it never wuz..~DMX |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
but alex i thought i was your god! once again youve managed to bring out a very powerful narrative. i love reading your poems...so keep them coming and ill keep reading adamz...muah! life's not about who wins or loses, or about whos got the better car,or the most money. it's about living,and trying to make the best of what we have. |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
Crooked Halos, This is a very powerful poem. I enjoyed it a lot. Dawn |
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