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Crooked Halos - From an Oak Tree's Limb
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Crooked Halos - From an Oak Tree's Limb |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
A lonely girl sits on the porch, Her eyes locked on the moon, Her bottom lip begins to quake With mem'ries of that afternoon. He’s gone; she’d seen him lying there, His lips so cold and pale, Those lips she’d kissed each time before, Before those lips grew stale. Hot tears start to flood her eyes, Her head falls to her hands, Those tear-filled eyes slowly lift To where the oak tree stands. She quickly rises to her feet, And towards that tree she treads, Tears still screaming down her face, To face the thing she dreads. Bare-foot, standing on the grass, Her eyes locked on that tree Searching for the words to say, She drops upon her knees. "Why’d you let him kill himself?! Why’d you let him die?! He hung himself from your limbs, Why’d you let him die...?" --------------- Part 6 of the series....from here on out I'm gonna stop putting numbers in the titles. -Adam "If life is so significant, then why do we die?" |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
These crooked halo poems are awesome! man people must think i am morbid, but maybe i am. Anyway I love your style of writing keep it up! Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial) |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
Heh...they must think you're morbid? You should see the looks I got today at school when I let my English teacher read the Crooked Halos series. -Adam "If life is so significant, then why do we die?" |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
So sad!!!  Adam, what's with the murderous trees? Hehe...erm. o_O; But wow! This was...morbid, but really well written! The rhyme scheme and the flow and the meter...almost flawless. This was worth reading! Thanks so much for the read! -Leah Va pensiero sull' ali dorate... |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
Murderous trees.....heh....I guess it comes from a childhood memory of watching skeleton-like trees in the winter twilight. You know how they can get that creepy sort of feel to them that makes you wonder what really happened at that tree? Either that, or too many movies and documentaries that showed scenes of lynchings... -Adam "If life is so significant, then why do we die?" |
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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Wow this was so sad...your really amazing with these poems...i cant stop reading them!!! Amazing job!! yOu GeT wAt u PaId 4 bUt i JuS hAd nO..iNtEnTion oF liVin tHis waY --Counting crows |
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AngelPoet87 Member
since 2001-04-21
Posts 280Indy |
This one genuinly touched me for reasons I can't say.. I don't really know what to say other than good job |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
wow... this was awesome. I love your meter in each poem in the series. Awesome work, Adam. I'm looking forward to the next in the series.. --Marie I wish your fingers could touch all I can't say... no one should ever feel this alone. |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
wonderful read adamz....the whole 5 poems... you write beautifully well, and the stories are amazing  ...the whole lots in my library...now write some more quick!!! &   eyes...........feeel...D |
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LCBS Senior Member
since 2001-11-29
Posts 532Connecticut |
You have a real gift, you should be proud of your work, and I thank you for dealing with topics that I can relate to so much. Suicide is quickly becoming an epidemic and anyone that has dealt with it realizes how much it effects the people around it. Your a wonderful poet, and I cant wait to read more. LCBS I was drowning in my own tears, until you threw me a life preserver |
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