Teen Poetry #5 |
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Beneath the Flesh |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Drifting over uncertain ideas that I can blindly entertain, I find a numb feeling coating itself over my senses I fear that I may not recognize a breath of air if I come across it I feel thick heavy doors made of metal and secrets deep in my soul Wandering through the labyrinth of my depths, I exist in my shadows while searching for the door Dark hallways of giant gray stones, Damp and dripping with rain I pass through quietly Keeping my eyes on the endless corridor until finally I see the two thick, heavy doors existing intensely at the end Yet I dare not rush to these doors and open them with enthusiasm For fear that the screaming girl whose cries echo through the corridors with a sense of hopeless captivity that chills me to the bone lives on the other side.. Deep inside I think she lives there I think she’s dying there Fearing that I can’t save her 1.22.02 Jaime ![]() -- the calm before the storm -- jaimespoetry.blogspot.com [This message has been edited by Dark Enchantress (01-22-2002 02:50 PM).] |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
This is really interesting The imagery is excellent Good job! Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial) |
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since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
WoW..great job!!!! Powerful stuff...nicely done! yOu GeT wAt u PaId 4 bUt i JuS hAd nO..iNtEnTion oF liVin tHis waY --Counting crows |
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zarina Member
since 2001-05-19
Posts 180 |
waw..this is so.. I don't know what to say. It's great ![]() I'm always myslef. Isn't that enough for you? |
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Fading Away![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Wonderful imagery! This was amazing, Jaime. As usual, the darkness and eeriness was enough to make this one shine. But the power of your words are amazing. Well done! I enjoyed this. ![]() --Marie I wish your fingers could touch all I can't say... no one should ever feel this alone. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Brilliant interpretation of yourself, Jaime. This really caught my attention for the simple fact that it is so *real*. Most poems are written on a superficial level but you really delve into the meaning behind the piece and bring it to life. Yay! An interesting writer!! ![]() ![]() Thanks for the read. I'm very glad that I stumbled over this. ~AF~ "No wonder I do not make people comfortable. I am a mirror. I have far too many things to say." - Mouthing the Words |
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lilmissbabyteddybear Junior Member
since 2003-03-16
Posts 17Abilene, Texas |
i loved the way you described everything in this poem..you have a great imagenation.. i like it. ~+~+~JeNnYgOoD~+~+~ |
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Broken Member
since 2000-03-12
Posts 271The woods |
I feel thick heavy doors made of metal and secrets deep in my soul I had a look in my library, and there you were ![]() But anyway, I pulled those lines out, as they well describe the way I feel right now. And I wasn't exactly disapointet with the rest of the poem eighter. Nice piece of work. Your friend ~Espen~ Such griefs with such men well agree, |
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