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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden 
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Lying on a blanket spread out on the hillside Darkness creeping o'er everything stars shining in the sky. Hold me, would you? Don't ruin the moment by saying no. Are you scared I'll leave tomorrow? The day after? day after day after that? You don't talk much anymore I guess there's nothing left to say. You know me inside out every vein's your river in and out of me. Every hole in my heart's been filled you carry a bucket of cement just waiting for it to dry now. My soul's just common knowledge. Or at least it is to you. wrote this a while ago.... Don't let your mind wander, it's much to small to be out by itself. |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
I'm not quite sure what to say that wouldn't sound superficial or far too typical. But I mean what I say... This is an awkward situation to try and put into words, so the fact that you did it so well is amazing in itself. You just expressed yourself so well. I really enjoyed reading this poem. Thank you. Jaime  -- the calm before the storm -- jaimespoetry.blogspot.com [This message has been edited by Dark Enchantress (01-22-2002 01:12 PM).] |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Thanks Jaime. I wasn't sure at first if I was going to put this on here or not... Don't let your mind wander, it's much to small to be out by itself. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Allysa -- are you still talking about this one person? be done with it..... hope we talk on IM again get on once in a while will ya  thanks for sharing là où est mon amour? |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
The ending here was awesome! That was enough to give me chills And listen to acire... sounds like he knows what he's talking about. I enjoyed this. I look forward to more  --Marie I wish your fingers could touch all I can't say... no one should ever feel this alone. |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Acire, me and that person are still on good terms but he's way too controlling for me. I've found a better guy, possibly two....  but never two at the same time.Thanks everyone! Don't let your mind wander, it's much to small to be out by itself. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I know how you feel...i liked this a lot allysa..i was gonna say i hope things worked out for you 2 but then i saw that u told acire that he's too controlling for you so i hope that your happy w/the way things turned out hun and if not ::hugs:: yOu GeT wAt u PaId 4 bUt i JuS hAd nO..iNtEnTion oF liVin tHis waY --Counting crows |
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