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The edge of the deep green sea
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The edge of the deep green sea |
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Ginners Member
since 2000-07-22
Posts 339Mullica Hill, New Jersey |
Standing in my living room, With innocent intentions, And a picture of you in my head, (Like always) Then for a moment I faltered, Lost track and lost direction, A mistake an innocent agreement, Followed by an innocent smile, (If only I had known) Now I find myself here, Standing at ‘the edge of the deep green sea’, With someone who isn’t you, (When it should be) Watching the sun set, It’s not your hand in mine anymore, And I am feeling all those things, I used to feel with you, (I know it is wrong, but I don’t care) Then a moment I regret, Two hearts shattered in a brief moment, I can taste soft salty lips, (And they aren’t yours) I feel my necklace--with the star, The one you gave me, Burning into my cold skin, Reminding me of what I am doing, (Throwing away everything I know) What am I doing here, What have I done to us, Where do I go from here, (I don’t know anymore) I thought I would cry first, But his promises of love, Were followed by tears, And suddenly I find myself in OUR favorite song, (And you aren’t here anymore…) ........"From The Edge Of The Deep Green Sea" is one of my boyfriend and my favorite songs.It is a cure song, BTW.Only Robert Smith could think of a concept as beautiful as that song, but now that I have lived it, it doesn't seem so beautiful.hope you enjoyed!! "I'll build a wall if we can keep them on the other side"-NIN |
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Mon Cherie
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
Have never heard that song before, but you've written a really nice piece. Is this similar to the song lyrics? _,,,^.^,,,_ |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
I really like this peice, keep up the good work  "All things must end, but I can see my fate in your eyes" -Turin Breaks |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is beautiful... I could once really relate to these words. From the edge of the deep green sea is a great song, too Good taste in music.I look forward to seeing more. --Marie I wish your fingers could touch all I can't say... no one should ever feel this alone. |
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Ginners Member
since 2000-07-22
Posts 339Mullica Hill, New Jersey |
Thanx guys for responding. And no the words aren't similar to the song. Just the deep green sea and kiss thing here.... And so we watch the sun come up From the edge of the deep green sea....................... I've never been so Colourfully-see-through-head before I've never been so Wonderfully-me-you-want-some-more And all I want is to keep it like this You and me alone A secret kiss And don't go home Don't go away Don't let this end Please stay... Not just for today... "Never never never never never let me go" she says "Hold me like this for a hundred thousand million days" But suddenly she slows And looks down at my breaking face "Why do you cry? What did I say?" "But it's just rain" I smile Brushing my tears away... I wish I could just stop I know another moment will break my heart Too many tears Too many times Too many years I've cried over you How much more can we use it up? Drink it dry? Take this drug? Looking for something forever gone But something we will always want... "I'll build a wall if we can keep them on the other side"-NIN |
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*Satan'sFallenAngel* New Member
since 2002-01-21
Posts 5 |
When I saw that you had written this and double posted in dark passions as well I decided to come here. Hoping that this poem would be as beautiful as the one you wrote in there. And I was not mistaken, not to mention that the cure is my favorite band as well. This was exceptional. |
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C? Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 190 |
awesome. |
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