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fozzyozzy
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0 posted 2001-07-08 07:14 PM


Her Whisper

Her whispers whispers of jokes untold
                         (Did you hear this one...)
Her whispers whispers of loving bold
                         (Wait for me later...)
Her whispers whispers of nothing gold
                         (sha la la loo lee...)
           sometimes
Her whispers whispers of something cold
                         (leave me alone...)
Her whispers whispers under stressful fold
                         (I hate these people...)
Her whipsers whispers of disgusting mold
                         (she is trash...)
          always
Her whispers whispers of something i could hold
                         (tighter...)
Her whispers whispers that will never be sold
                         (Tell me secret...)
Her whispers whispers only she controlled
                         (cannot let you anymore...)
Her whispers are whispers reminding me of love too old...

"and Death i think is no paranthesis"-e.e. cummings

© Copyright 2001 Sean Michael DeFlora - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-07-08 09:38 PM


Wow this was wonderful...loved it. Thanks for sharing.

Be kind, be true, be bold, be you.

Freedom comes when you learn to live unafraid.

Spice
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2 posted 2001-07-08 09:43 PM


This was different.
Nice read, Sean.

Spine Grinder
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3 posted 2001-07-08 09:58 PM


wow, i liked this one a lot. thanks 4 the read.

fall hard, practice harder not to fall
Don't belong, Don't exist, Don't give a S***, Don't ever judge me  -Slipknot
death is certain, life is not.

zarina
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4 posted 2001-07-09 04:06 AM


different, but nice. I like all of your poems alot. And this one's going to my library.

I am always myself. Isn't that enough for you?

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5 posted 2001-07-09 03:52 PM


Nicely done.  I liked the repitition in this poem.  Great job!

*Amanda*
I need more time to find the real me...
to fly like the birds... to be set free.

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6 posted 2001-07-10 04:29 PM


I liked this one a lot. Really nice format. You are one creative writer. I really enjoyed this one!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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7 posted 2001-07-10 09:01 PM


the format was great! ...very different read...enjoyed it.

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

mistic
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8 posted 2001-07-11 12:18 PM


very well written!  
Low Man's Lyric
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9 posted 2001-07-11 02:20 PM


Cool, I liked this one. Interesting structure but it was very enjoyable.

"Right now I'm having amnesia and deja vu at the same time. I think I've forgotten this before."
~Steven Wright

stace_co2003
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10 posted 2001-07-18 07:48 PM


*confused*

it took me 3 times to get this, lol. but then again, that doesn't mean much cuz I'm so dingy, lol.

still a great poem and an interesting format. have I read anything else of yours before?

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