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MoeRocko
Member

since 2001-04-25

Posts 166
West Virginia

0 posted 2001-07-17 04:12 PM

It was the fear of you that lead me to you
And it's the fear of you that takes getting used to
I've never been one to hang my heart on a thread
But you spun me around and loved me instead

I know I could turn to something other than you
Cause I don't understand you and why you're after me
I've never been the saint you wanted me to turn to
And I can't see the view
from your eyes you look at me through

So cut below the surface and try hard not to notice
That I could be so foolish thinking I'm alright
I've got no one to hold me, I've got no one to carry
Everything inside of me that I won't let you see

But I'm Alright

If there's a such thing as a Genius, then I'm one. If there's no such thing then I don't care... ~John Lennon

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

1 posted 2001-07-17 07:53 PM

Moe- I dunno...There is SOMETHING about this that I'm REALLY liking. It's one of my all time favs of yours. Great Write!

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

2 posted 2001-07-17 08:14 PM

This is VERY well weritten, Ewok. You're writing some pretty awesome stuff lately... very impressive! Nice work. I really enjoyed this, and hope to see more SOON!

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning...

knightlyshadows
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 791
obscured vision

3 posted 2001-07-18 12:21 PM

*takes sumthing from her box and gives it to u* love you ewoksters.
*hugs* loved this alot. uve been writing more emotionally lately it seems. hope all is well. i miss u.
tiff

I am Gaudior
the shadow cast of valour
to cloak our vision
the remants of days long past
lay waking in the twilight

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2001-07-18 01:34 AM

I thought this was fine. I felt that it lacked a bit of the punches and power that your other 2 poems I recently read had. I found the ending to this one to fit greatly though. I liked it.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

allie
Member

since 2001-07-09

Posts 218
Australia

5 posted 2001-07-18 04:36 AM

Very good.
flows nicely,
and on a good subject.

allie

CwboyAtHeart
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 541
Selah, WA, USA

6 posted 2001-07-18 07:50 PM

Thought this one was pretty good. However, not my favorite of yours. The flow was good and the poem was overall really good. But I don't know, not my favorite of yours. Good job, still.

      - Cody -

Note To Self:  If Pigs Can Fly, So Can I!!!

If someboy laughs at me, does that make me funny or just plain stupid?

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