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Hardkore
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since 2001-01-31
Posts 33
San DIego, California

0 posted 2002-01-17 09:47 PM


I want
to walk
Through the
Field of
the dead
I want
to eat
all of
their bread
I’ll swallow
Their sins
Spin them
upon the
top of
a pin
With no
Fear or
Regret
I’ll recall
the story,
Tell it to
my kids
after dinner
As I smoke
Tobacco
in the den
Their eyes
will light up
With joy
and disgust
They’ll awe
at my
Broken dice luck

Passion fuels my love
Passion becomes consumed by my love
Without my love I become passionless


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tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs
1 posted 2002-01-18 10:04 AM


Interesting format and interesting choice of words! I thought overall this was just...VERY INTERESTING lol..thanks for sharing!

yOu GeT wAt u PaId 4 bUt i JuS hAd nO..iNtEnTion oF liVin tHis waY --Counting crows

Marshalzu
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2 posted 2002-01-19 04:31 PM


I like the format you've used it's very orignal, this is a most interesting peice and I am glad that you could share it with us

Andrew

"All things must end, but I can see my fate in your eyes" -Turin Breaks

Fading Away
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3 posted 2002-01-19 07:12 PM


VERY interesting style... it's always refreshing to see something new in the forums.  I really enjoyed this... the content was always creative.  Very well done!  I hope to see more soon.

--marie

I wish your fingers could touch all I can't say... no one should ever feel this alone.

Dark Enchantress
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4 posted 2002-01-19 08:15 PM


I enjoy reading poetry in general, but it's rare that a poem really gets me. (For lack of a better way to put it.) I like that it's rather abstract and very deep. You can get a lot out of it depending on how willing you are to look into it. As I'm sure someone else has already said, it's refreshing. Thank you for posting this.

Jaime

-- the calm before the storm --

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C?
Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 190

5 posted 2002-01-20 12:40 PM


yeyayahayayaya, wicked poem! liked the first idea the best!
fearing-laughter
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since 2001-04-24
Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)
6 posted 2002-01-20 02:14 AM


hey this is really kool. how interesting...
-bergundy-

maybe i'll catch fire, something nice to warm me. something pure to burn away the darkness, that hides inside my mind. -alkaline trio-

Watergun*Angel
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since 2001-12-20
Posts 8
La la land
7 posted 2002-01-20 09:36 PM


It was different.  Liked the format.  Great read.

*Sarah*  

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