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Ambiguous And Ludicrous |
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Hardkore Junior Member
since 2001-01-31
Posts 33San DIego, California |
She sat on the edge of our bed silently weeping into her hands Sunlight crept into the room through cracked blinds on the window Her aged blond hair was almost white but it looked like the day we meet, in this light Her wrinkled hands were still, milky smooth Like a dried rose, they maintained their beauty softly trembling under the pressure of her tears She cried for the ills of humanity She cried for the loss of innocence She cried because I was a spiteful old man and I just sat there, rigid, arms at my sides staring blankly at her blond-white hair and her trembling hands Sitting in my torn shorts wondering why I hadn’t been feed She deserved better Passion fuels my love |
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since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Wow..i really enjoyed this...great post!! yOu GeT wAt u PaId 4 bUt i JuS hAd nO..iNtEnTion oF liVin tHis waY --Counting crows |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Great work I really enoyed the read  , keep up the good work."All things must end, but I can see my fate in your eyes" -Turin Breaks |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is beautiful, Garrett!!! I loved the way you also adressed the world's problems with her own. The imagery you used was kick-arse... I really, really liked this. I can't wait to see more, hopefully soon! --Marie I wish your fingers could touch all I can't say... no one should ever feel this alone. |
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Mon Cherie
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
This is actually very sweet, growing old together with your loved one... Great write!!_,,,^.^,,,_ |
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