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Ree Ree
Member

since 2001-06-28

Posts 56
providence, RI

0 posted 2002-01-17 04:35 PM

yesterday sucked
I hate those days
   long days
  when you remember
   what's gone
  Things you don't have
    anymore
those precious things
   the world has
    torn
  away from you
   for no real reason
    just because
   it can.

That yesterday I couldn't
even look
in the mirror
   at myself
because everytime I do
  I see myself
    alone
  you're not there
   in that reflected picture
    single photograph
  just like you'll
   never
  be again.

And yesterday I couldn't think
  about much more
   than you
        and me
  you and me who
     don't exist
  that died long ago
  and even though
     we're dead
  I still can't seem
     to let you go.
  What the hell am I
     waiting for?
  A dream come true?
     maybe.
  A nightmare...

Again yesterday I found myself
still holding on
      to you.
  Like I actually
beleive you'll come back
  and hold me
   and care
like I thought you
    once had.
  Like I actually want you
   to come back.

When yesterday I glanced
   at my clock
    the day was over.
   Finally over.
Anniverseries suck!
  Days to remember,
   celebrate
   or mourn.
To think to much
   about things
   that happened
   so long ago.

Then yesterday I opened
  my window
And the snow was
     falling,
   so gracefully.
Of course, it only
    reminded
   me of you.
  Not for any reason,
   just because
  you once told me
     what it meant
  and what made you happy
      and sad.

And yesterday I remembered
      everything
  I really cared
   about those things
   those things you said
  I listened
    can't you tell?
Then I told you
       everything
   my hopes and dreams
      my doubts and fears
   But did you listen?
      NO, OFCOURSE NOT!

yesterday I realized
   you didn't even care
   you probubly had
      something
  more important
   on your mind
      someone
much more
        important
   on your mind.
  I just wasn't
       important enough
   could never be
       important enough
  for you
    you and your
       frigin snow.

TigerZ
Member

since 2002-01-02

Posts 83
Ontario, Canada

1 posted 2002-01-17 06:42 PM

Nice poem and i know exactly how you feel...

A life without love…is no life at all.

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

2 posted 2002-01-18 10:07 AM

WOW do i know how you feel..you put your feelings into this one and it was great...thanks for sharing!

yOu GeT wAt u PaId 4 bUt i JuS hAd nO..iNtEnTion oF liVin tHis waY --Counting crows

Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
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3 posted 2002-01-19 04:36 PM

Wow... this poem is err so long... but I love it

... I love the way you start each stanza with repetition... keep on sharing

"All things must end, but I can see my fate in your eyes" -Turin Breaks

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

4 posted 2002-01-19 07:14 PM

Yes, the length is quite intimidating... but you did well. As Zu said, the repeating made those stanzas quite powerful, and from a stylistic viewpoint, you did a wonderful job.

Well done, Ree Ree. Hope to see more.

--Marie

I wish your fingers could touch all I can't say... no one should ever feel this alone.

china doll
Junior Member

since 2002-01-20

Posts 22

5 posted 2002-01-20 03:08 PM

very readable and understandable...Word of advice:find someone new as soon as possible, it will help to take your mind off of him...at least temporarily. Don't think that you don't want anyone else, you can-it's all in the power of your mind my dear

He doesn't deserve your attention! Good luck...Lots of hugs...
Joanna

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