Teen Poetry #5 |
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maybe we can work this out |
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Allysa![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden ![]() |
crying simple little tears, flowing down my face. maybe we can work this out you say maybe we can work this out. silence like a hand around my throat it holds me. maybe we can work this out you say maybe we can work this out. no don't call, don't write leave me alone. maybe we can work this out you say maybe we can work this out. never we can never fix the past we can't know what the future holds. no we can never make life ours we can never work this out. and still you say maybe we can work this out maybe we can work this out. I don't even want to hear your voice in the backround of my mind. Don't let your mind wander, it's much to small to be out by itself. |
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Alyssa![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
yo sis, email me tell me whats goin on girl! [email protected] i enjoyed this, its kinda different from your previous posts, but i totally liked it. EMAILME ....hey wheres the cream filling?!... |
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xShUgArHiGhx![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
You definately have a lotta anger goin on in this poem and you expressed your feelings and emoti know how you feel...ughhh u just wanna scream!! yOu GeT wAt u PaId 4 bUt i JuS hAd nO..iNtEnTion oF liVin tHis waY --Counting crows |
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Mon Cherie![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
I sorta like the very last line. It creates a certain impact. ![]() Whether things should be worked out depends on how much you care about that person and the relationship. But sometimes when you're hurt beyond hope, and there is no longer any trust, it's rather useless to work things out. I hope you'll get over this phase soon. ![]() _,,,^.^,,,_ |
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Jenn Cirrincione![]() ![]()
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Oooh I like...this is angry. Very nice job here. ![]() Sometimes it's best to say goodbye. Jenn "You are the strength, that keeps me walking- you are the hope that keeps me trusting." |
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Missthang Member
since 2001-07-03
Posts 103 |
granted, i don't know the whole situation but i know this full of A LOT of anger and pent-up frustration. it almost seems as if this isn't the first time this person has screwed up. in that case, i think it is time to say good-bye. but i believe that everyone deserves a second chance. if you haven't given him one i say that's an option. good write. -ab "Whatever you are doing, love yourslef for doing it. |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
I agree with Missthang, but sometimes they don't deserve a second chance, stand your ground and don't be walked over! Remember there is love in the world!! Great peice!!! MelZ!! You can't hurt me anymore than I have hurt myself already... |
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Fading Away![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This reminds me a lot of a song I know called "Letting Go". I liked this... sometimes letting go is the hardest thing to do, but always feels awesome when you're finally over it. ![]() Good write, and good luck. --Marie 'Things are getting worse but I feel a lot better... and that's all that really matters to me.' |
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Acies![]()
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
The future is what you make it to be Give it a chance Allysa Just give it a chance thanks for the read keep em coming là où est mon amour? |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
this is gripping, very powerful poem me likes ![]() *Pixie* -=Love starts with a SMILE, grows with a KISS, and ends with a TEAR=- |
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Allysa![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Thanks all. Acire, it's over between me and Justin. It's gone, i'm over it, but believe it or not, I don't think he quite is. His girlfriend is best buds with a close friend of mine and she's been thinking about dumping him lately... I'm like his "safety" in all this. Well, not anymore... I got to go find Cole... Don't let your mind wander, it's much to small to be out by itself. |
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Acies![]()
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
haha good for you ![]() là où est mon amour? |
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Allysa![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Cole's best friend Mike came home w/ me and my buds for lunch today and he now knows that I like Cole so I believe he passed the message on....... and Justin will be incredibly pissed to know that Mike was in my room, sitting on my bed, playing my guitar. (thats not as wrong as it sounds) But you know what? I don't care. Don't let your mind wander, it's much to small to be out by itself. |
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