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46 and a half hours (of heaven)
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46 and a half hours (of heaven) |
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Alyssa
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
ok, warning, none of this ryhmes or flows quite right but i wanted to write something and this is what caem out...i wrote another piece but i think its more of an adult piece...lol..theyd delete it or sumthing so ill have to post it else where..please read all of this..its kinda long... 46 and a half hours (of heaven) Sunday night, 8 to midnight felt your touch for the first time in a long time met my soon to be mother-in-law and sister too and just simply sat there, with you hugged and kissed, laughed with you goodnight kisses and sweet dreams too Monday 9 in the morning, till a little after midnight at breakfast out, shopped a little spent the day holding hands watched movies, laughed together again cuddled on the couch, brought in 2002 with a kiss My body atop of yours, your eyes so bright you laughed at the silly stuff i did and i at you layed in your arms, until you had to go Tuesday, 10 AM to the mall and out to eat public displays of affection... your smile, genuine, bright and warm.. your funny faces and sweet lips the way you watched me and held my hand your touch, so familiar we talked all afternoon, about nothing in particular but everything interesting layed on the couch from 6 to midnight Wednesday, 11 to midnight last day, last hours time slipping noon to three couldnt touch you talk to you or nothing.. just sat and stared because tammy was there later got a phone call saw your gorgeous face fall saw the hurt burning in your eyes im so sorry about your grandpa dying you said it was ok, but the hurt, it gave you away it looked so bad, deep, fresh told me you had to leave on thursday and that made you sad more than the horrible news we held each other then, and cried i like to think i helped you then That night, i remember glancing at the clock time was going going gone you sad something, made me feel kinda bad you joked and said you would leave then to hand you your phone you moved off the couch and layed on the floor id pushed you away i knew then that id never let you get away we cried then i didnt want you to go, nor did you want to midnight came your dad did too i walked out to say bye and thanks hope to see you soon All i remember is the goodbye kiss your sweet lips on mine your taste in my mouth, our tongues entwined in love, your arms around me, hand in hand the you slowly let go of my hand as the hot tears filled my eyes as i walked up the steps i remembered, the 46 and a half hours of heaven id had...... ok, to fill you in, my man is in Illinois (ugh) and i am in Ohio, not for long though, im going to go to college in Illinois, and well, i stayed with a friend this week so i could be with Josh b/c my rents dont know about him and the girl, Tammy, she knows my rents and we had to go to my friends shop all day and we just told tammy he was the computer maintence man..hehe you should see my ring..its white gold, with 7 dimaonds...lol hope this 'piece' wasnt to bad... thanks for reading!! ....Handle with care... |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
*sigh* I'm not one to go all gushy with poems but I've been with a guy that makes you feel this way and it's bliss. I love what you've done with the times and everything. It makes it sound like a diary entry or something. Very creative of you, Alyssa.  Great work. One of the love pieces that I truly did enjoy. Thanks for sharing. ~AF~ If this is all the world has to offer, I want a refund on my life. |
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HiddenSparklez Member
since 2000-12-29
Posts 190British Columbia, Canada |
Awww... what a wonderful write about a romantic story... and it makes it even better to know that true happiness from love DOES exist!  "You do what you do, you say what you say, you try to be everything to everyone... come on now, do that stupid dance for me" -Everclear |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Very cute poem alyssa....sounds like your very happy! ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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Alyssa
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
hey thanks guys ....Handle with care... |
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aaron woodside Member
since 2001-09-26
Posts 256 |
Hey you. I wanna read the other one.  Send it to me? Very nice write. Glad you and Josh are doing so well. I'll e-mail you soon. Laterex animo, Aaron There are no great men, only men in great circumstances. |
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Alyssa
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
thanks buddy i just sent you the other poem glad to hear from you thanks all for reading! ....Handle with care... |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Hmmm...this poem was creative and informative. But---there were some times when it rose an eyebrow of mine. I'm still debating whether I'll take it behind the scenes and have this checked over. Hrrrmmm... Other than that, good job! |
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Alyssa
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
whoa, yer scaring me, what do you mean "take it behind the scenes and have it checked over"????? thanks fer reading .. ....Handle with care... |
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