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0 posted 2002-01-08 05:05 PM


~Distant Voices~

A distant echo
Of Spoken word
A Quiet Whisper
Across the Ocean
W h I s P s  O f  W i N d
Carried on white clouds
Rise above the mountain pass
Through dreary day
And freezing night

Echoes in the silence


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To someone very special

Never enter a competition you can't win outright... nobody likes a loser

© Copyright 2002 Andrew Sewell - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-01-08 05:47 PM


awww. I liked this very much, very soothing.  She's lucky Nice job.

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2 posted 2002-01-08 07:09 PM


*Does Snake chuckle* Nice work! I would've enjoyed this if you continued this longer!
*winks* Don't worry---she'll get the message!

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3 posted 2002-01-08 07:18 PM


Hey Zu, no deep reply here man, sorry. I enjoyed it. I too woulda enjoyed it being longer, and the ending stumbled me a bit, but again, this was a beautiful read. Very well written mate.

Sincerely,
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4 posted 2002-01-08 07:35 PM


Aw, man, it's not about me! Geeze! Yes, I am sure I want to reply. It looped me the first time, but the second time I was like, "cool!" and the third time I was like, "aw, that's so sweet! Wish he would email me..." LOL. I too must add my remarks about enjoying much much much more it were longer, but whatever, to each her own, right? I still liked it! That middle line, though. The caps looped me right around! Then I got it. Great write!

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5 posted 2002-01-08 10:51 PM


I agree..this did happen to be a very soothing poem...::sigh::..well done hun!

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6 posted 2002-01-08 11:53 PM


very sweet and relaxing

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7 posted 2002-01-09 03:32 AM


Thank you for all your wonderful replies, it means a lot to me to see so many nice responces. I'm not sure if I could add to this poem without ditracting from it... maybe i'll give it a try and you may see a re-post somewhere . Once again thank you for your replies

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