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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA 
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Hey guys wanted to try something new..a new perspective, new levels of pain and awakening..I want to broaden my horizons... Lots of Love, Kristen..enjoy m'dears =) Beatles playing on the radio Torn pieces of her memory scattered upon the floor Candles burning Flames flickering, dancing and flirting amongst the moonlight He's sprawled upon his bed In a druken state Haunted constantly by her face Intoxicated with rage and constant pain Each time he relives the scene Of her walking out that door Even he knows That all the roses and poetry in the world And all the apologies Won't bring back her smile Because once she walked out that door Neither one were aware that the angels stood outside that door To take her back home... |
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mistic Member
since 2001-05-06
Posts 233Idaho, U.S.A. |
I really liked this one. it had lots of emotion wrapped up in it, and was worded very well. good job  thanks for sharing |
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aaron woodside Member
since 2001-09-26
Posts 256 |
I liked this. Very sad. Keep em coming. ex animo, Aaron There are no great men, only men in great circumstances. |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
wow... i think you have got the somehting different thing down ot a T this poem is sooo good.. made me want to cry :*( *L* well great work!! *Pixie |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Very sad and emotion filled piece I liked it. But anyway I really loved this piece kep up the great work. Lauren "I just needed someone to talk to you were just to busy with yourself."-Staind |
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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Wow really great piece. I liked it a lot. It had a lot of emotion in it but was also very sad. Its nice to try new formats isnt it?? Good job and hope to see more soon! ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Wow, very nice, and very sad. Good piece... Titus |
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C? Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 190 |
eugh, I know this scenario all too well, you make me remember...that means it worked! good job! |
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Cinderelly Member
since 2001-12-31
Posts 189NM, USA |
Wow . . . Great imagery!  |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
The Beatles... that made me want to read this one right away  I enjoyed this. You've expressed your emotions clearly, and concisely. I look forward to seeing more from you --Marie "It was a long December, but there's reason to believe that maybe this year will be better than the last." (Counting Crows) |
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LoneWolf Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 384IL |
This was really good, i liked it a lot. good job. It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that. |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
ooOoOo i really liked the ending! great piece **You can't always trust the people you want to** |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
This one reminds me of a short story that one of my friends wrote...about this guy who's girlfriend is killed in a car accident, and it drives him to the brink of suicide, because he feels guilty that he didn't do something to stop it. As the rest of your poetry, I really like this one. The Beatles was a nice touch. -Adam "If life is so significant, then why do we die?" |
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