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Teen Poetry #5

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Ree Ree
Member

since 2001-06-28

Posts 56
providence, RI

0 posted 2001-12-30 11:23 PM

Not so much the space
just the time

Not so much that she was mad
just she made such dumb mistakes

Not so much that he didn't care
just they wouldn't let him.

So they were apart
and life went on
as it always had before.

Not so much the distance
just the waiting

Not so much that she didn't want to anymore
just she couldn't

Not so much that he couldn't wait
just he didn't know how.

So they grew apart
and life went on
as it always did
as it had to.

Not so much that they weren't together
just that they had once been in love

Not so much that she didn't want to go back
just he wouldn't take her

Not so much that he didn't want to
just he couldn't.

So they'd grown apart
As life had gone on
as it always does
there's no changing that.

prov1717
Member

since 2001-12-26

Posts 74
NE

1 posted 2001-12-30 11:30 PM

wow! i must say you just really impressed me. i loved the format and more than that, i loved the idea of the poem. its so honest and true. i wish i could say more about it but i would just write a whole lot of words that basically say "wow" keep it up.

Voiceless
Senior Member

since 2001-02-19

Posts 686
Under the stars upon the wind

2 posted 2001-12-31 04:04 PM

I loved the set up, but what i really liked
was what you were getting across I liked how
you started each stanza. It read really well
and I really got what was being expressed.
I liked it a lot!

Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial)

Pixie-Babe03
Member

since 2000-08-29

Posts 387
Central Maine