Teen Poetry #5 |
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the real me |
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prov1717 Member
since 2001-12-26
Posts 74NE |
you look at me and see the girl who lives inside the golden world but don't believe thats all there is to me she smiles through a thousand tears and harbors adolescent fears she dreams of all that she can never be she wades insecurity and hides herself inside of me dont say she takes it all for granted i'm well aware of what i have don't think i'm disenchanted please understand its seems as though i've always been somebody outside looking in well here i am for all of them to bleed but they can't take my heart from me and they can't bring me to my knees they'll never know the real me |
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Skyfire![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
"but they can't take my heart from me and they can't bring me to my knees they'll never know the real me" I love it!!! Excellent job! You have definate strength!!! Right on! I thought your flow was a little choppy, but that sort of adds to your poem. You know you're Canadian when if something's broken, the first thing you ask is if it can be fixed with WD-40 or Duct Tape |
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C? Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 190 |
I can totally relate to what you are saying in here, don't worry there are many of us who still understand, despite what you think your school friends know of you ![]() |
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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia |
Magical post #69! lol jk ahem excuse me, i apologize for those who are offended. now to the poem, I found it was a nice representation of what you're feeling. Good job. "and Death i think is no paranthesis"-e.e. cummings |
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Shygirl82 Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 245Ilinois |
Oooohhh I liked this one ALOT....I can really relate to what you are saying here.... Thanks for sharing...cant wait to see more. ~Nikki~ Smile!! You never know who may be falling in love with it... |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
Wow!! it is like you just wrote my life story.. wow.. I love it. the flow is great expression very nice. A great poem that is going to my library.. thanks for writing this, you don't know how much this means to me.. Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial) |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
This was really good. i dotn have much to say, im sorta brain dead. keep writing, and keep your dignity close your heart. Regina |
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xShUgArHiGhx![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I completely agree with this poem right here and how people will never know the real you cuz they're so caught up in their own lifes and cant get past the exterior of things to really take a look at the inside...i love this poem..so much truth to it ![]() ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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Fading Away![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is very well written, prov. she smiles through a thousand tears and harbors adolescent fears she dreams of all that she can never be she wades insecurity I loved those lines. Heavy emotions... and you portray them well. Nicely done ![]() --Marie "It was a long December, and there's reason to believe that maybe this year will be better than the last." (Counting Crows) |
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