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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
tears must be shed im living after ive died my life is waiting for me ordinary but nothing the same doesnt anybody hear me? too busy to listen it seems im the greatest fan of you but its been awhile since i told you maybe im just not ready ive had a bad day or is that just life? not that you would understand avoidance of this emotion you release memories of where we lead them where we left them behind dont leave me to myself theres nothing more i can take i cry at these images black and white they flash is anybody there? i watch my faith slip away im alive, ill survive sleeping away tomorrow too weak to stop the flow life is waiting for me drowning in all, yet i live i know everything i knew it at one time, i promise? im not responsible this is too much a relationship of ice one wrong step and it cracks toghether there is nothing we cant do i dont have alot to offer you but here i am looking in from this corner where i hide everything thats me all this time, time is nothing i can see through the lies yet i waste all this time im in the dark living this hell cumbersome entrapment that i live united i stand alone in my finest hours this will be an uncertain time theres a place for me to wait so i wait for the tide to come in with everystep its farther away it seems ill never make it back to how far weve come how ever this happens, just remember its whatever makes you happy i couldnt change for you im sorry, i didnt mean to “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” I know Im not perfect but I can smile & I hope that you c this heart behind my tired eyes [This message has been edited by knightlyshadows (edited 07-06-2001).] |
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Marshalzu  
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Great work I really enjoyed the read, and remember there are always people willing to listen to you here at Pip and if you want to talk you could e-mail me at [email protected] Anyway great work on the poetry I thought you did well expressing yourself. Zu "Here we are again finding ourselves at the end Of the wrong stick I guess it's far too late I'm building up the barricades In my head" -My Vitriol |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
the expression of your feelings was heartfelt Tiff  ...i hope everythings, ok though...im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
You did a wonderful job expressing all of your feelings and emotions in this poem. Keep up the great work Tiff! *Amanda* |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Wow...Tiff. This was amazing. an absolutely amazing free verse. You expressed yourself wonderfully. I liked the last 2 lines the best. |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
You express your emotions nicely in your poem.Keep up the awsome work! Lauren |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
This was emotinally charged. It was sad. ut it was an amazing poem. Regina If you only understood my pain then maybe you could learn to be my friend. Be there. My crying shoulder. The smiles. And the caring i need to survive. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Nicely done here tiff! I really thought you did awesome on this one.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Tiff, you have always been consistent with yur poems Another great one as usual Seems like you haven't been sharing much lately though Hope you be as busy in pip as before thanks for sharing hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
WOW Tiff, this is wonderful! You've written this beautifully revealing all of the emotions and the pain. Thanks for this eye opening read. ~AF~ Psychopathic chickens are plotting against me... |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I really liked this one, Tiff. Very heartfelt words, here. VERY nicely done --Marie You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds. |
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