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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Anger My heart is filled with anger But who cares? Obviously you don't Because you just sit there and stare. As I pace back and forth u just sit there But never ask me why. You make me feel like I'm nothing Because of you I feel like I should die. Every night I come home and cry myself to sleep But I won't let you see my tears. Even though your the one who causes them And even if you knew you would never be here. You call me your friend but your not mine Because a friend would be here for me. And you never are But who knows maybe some day you will see. I wrote this because for the most part that describes my life but no one ever notices.And that hurts me more then anyone will ever understand! |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
hey....I noticed....and I care  sorry you are hurting right now.....it just plain sux. Hugs, and if you want to talk, you can always email me ~SEA |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
...this hit home for me...the whole poem...was full of emotions with powerful feelings expressed...i really liked this one...as i can totally relate...great poem. im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Ugh, I hate the feeling no one cares or notices when I'm upset and depressed. It's horrible. You expressed yourself very well. Such a strong write here. I liked this. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
*hugs* I'm sure many more people care than you think. Everyone goes through these times, and I hope you can come out of it with your head high, smiling I really enjoyed this poem. It sounds like a good, healthy vent. Thanks for sharing, and good luck with the situation, and I hope all goes well.--Marie You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds. |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
i care! So does everyone at passions, im sure of it. Anyways, loads of emotion in this poem. It was a good read. I know you're in a better place and though I cannot see your face, I know you're smiling down on me, saying everything's okay. ~R Kelly (I wish) |
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
This is an amazing poem, with excellent tone, structure and rhythm I liked it very much! Keep writing!  ^*~Kicking Kim~*^ "Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression" |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
wow... i feel as though i was looking in the mirror-- you described how i see myself like to the T... nice write. i totally agree with you!! Valerie "...And i want to take you down, but your soul could not be found, doesn't matter much you see cause your disease is killing me..." -Saliva |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked this. I thought you did awesome, but maybe instead of counting on your friends to notice when you're upset and so on, you should just tell them. I mean, if they're your friends shouldn't you feel comfortable enough to do so? Sometimes people can't always be psychics..... Anyway, i liked the poem.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
This is really sad *hugs* Hope things get better *hugs again* hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
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