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lilibeelee
Member

since 2001-07-12

Posts 143

0 posted 2001-11-28 10:11 PM

I cant feel the hurt,nor this pain
I cant feel my tears
My mind wonders and asks if I'm saine

I canot speak my own voice, yet I want it to be heard
My Ideas to you seem so ubsurd

There is a blindfold that covers my sight
So blind,so hurt,so confused
Everything I do seems not to be right
Someone remove this blinder, let me see the light

My head throbs, as my heart aches
My tears stream,as my heart breaks

I run out, storm down the stairs
all I see is evil glaires

I run down the road, with darkness in my fingertips
My tears roll down, from my cheeks to my lips

My Heart beats faster,my breath draws slow
Anger infuruated trough out my soul
My life is on display as though it's a show

Your doubts, Your comments, Your laughing ,your pointing
Its driving me insaine!
I do not know how much more of me will remain

Do you know me?Do you know my life?
Do you feel my struggles, and each and every strife?

Do you feel my tears? Do you feel what i feel?
Do you even know what it is that i feel?

DancinQueen

Senior Member

since 2000-07-29

Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA

1 posted 2001-11-28 10:29 PM

i really really liked this and the rhyming pattern. very interesting. the poem itself was beautiful. lots of pain, im sorry to hear that. even if you dont think this now, its making you stronger

keep posting

*dq

**You can't always trust the people you want to**

TopGunLauren
Senior Member

since 2000-08-02

Posts 718
California

2 posted 2001-11-28 10:39 PM

Very pain filled poem I hope you feel better soon.But anyway interesting poem I love it keep up the great work.
Lauren

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

3 posted 2001-11-29 10:23 AM

Aww hun...this is so sad...im sorry that your feeling this way right now ::hugs::..unfortunately no one can understand how you feel exactly but you...i've been where you are and i understand what your going through...::extra hug::

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

Poet Unknown
Member

since 2001-08-14

Posts 140
Missouri

4 posted 2001-11-29 06:43 PM

very good write

Do as you please....strike forth down upon your knees...Darkness Falls on Those Without Souls

Jezziekaka
Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 58
where the trees touch the sky

5 posted 2001-11-30 05:53 PM

So Sad!! Great poem!

be dangerous, unpredictable, and make a lot of noise!

[This message has been edited by Jezziekaka (edited 11-30-2001).]

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

6 posted 2001-12-01 01:22 PM

I think you have some really nice ideas here. I enjoyed this

Nicely done.

--Marie

If there's one thing I've learned, it's that the most frustrated people in the world are those who know they're stupid, but keep trying anyway.

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