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The candle of love
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The candle of love |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
The candle of love Doth burn As I yearn for you By my side but on The road I walk it's unlikely you'd survive. The candle of love Doth burn As I yearn for you near But on the bridge I walk That ends like a pier You would not be able To handle the fear. The candle of love Doth burn As I yearn for you here But on the wings I fly You would surely die. The candle of love Doth burn As I yearn for you My love And now i'm coming home Cause i've shed enough Blood. And the candle of love doth burn. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- [This message has been edited by Jeremiah Johnson (edited 11-28-2001).] |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
this is wonderful!  very well done |
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Yoda Junior Member
since 2001-11-28
Posts 19 |
Wow.. I really loved this. It's like one of those poems that just slaps you in the face because it speaks directly to you. This part particularly spoke to me: "The candle of love Doth burn As I yearn for you By my side but on The road I walk it's unlikely you'd survive" I truly enjoyed reading this.  You know its been a good day when you come home, realize you forgot your key again, and decide to climb through the doggie door instead of complaining [This message has been edited by Yoda (edited 11-28-2001).] |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
thank u both for your replies. and yoda welcome to PIP. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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Jezziekaka Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 58where the trees touch the sky |
Amazing! I loved this!! Da kaka be dangerous, unpredictable, and make a lot of noise! |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
I enjoyed this. The poem is very creative from a stylistic view point, and very well written. Nice work. --Marie If going to church makes you a Christian, then sitting in a garage makes you a car. |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Very nice Jeremiah. good work. Jenn "I want love on my own terms; after everything I've ever learned. Me, I carry too much baggage..." |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I always like hte use of some old english words great job and keep it up thanks for the wonderful read là où est mon amour? |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Hmm..how interesting. Good wording. It's good to see you've mixed two totally different styles of writing into one piece. It gives it uniqueness. Well done. Look forward to more. ~AF~ Why does Sea World have a seafood restaurant? I'm halfway through my fish burger and I realize, Oh my gosh....I could be eating a slow learner. |
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rena_beana New Member
since 2002-01-14
Posts 1 |
Amazing!!Your poems made me cry they are so intense...Very beautifully written!!Talk to you later hopefully Love always,Serena |
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Mon Cherie
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
Wow... This is truly a very romantic poem! Hope to read more like this... _,,,^.^,,,_ |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Nicely written! Well done, thanks for sharing yOu GeT wAt u PaId 4 bUt i JuS hAd nO..iNtEnTion oF liVin tHis waY --Counting crows |
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