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Ree Ree
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0 posted 2001-11-17 08:26 PM


  There's a light up there
without a lightbulb
and it's feeling useless like me
  There's a glaring light
coming from the hallway
and it's fading away like me
  I'll jut wait, till the day
when my heart is free
  There's a shattered glass
shing in the head lights
and it's lieing broken like me.


  There's a shooting star
sailing across the sky
and oh how i wish that were me
  There's a great big bird
flying inot the sun
he's so beautiful and free
  Someday soon, I'll awake
and that will be me
  There's a dark blue sky
without any star light
and it's feeling empty like me.

  
  There's light up there
without a lightbulb
and it's feeling useless like me........

[This message has been edited by Ree Ree (edited 11-18-2001).]

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DawnG
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1 posted 2001-11-17 11:40 PM


Ree Ree,

I hope you come to realize very soon that you are not a useless person. I will keep my fingers crossed for you that things turn around. Thanks for sharing.

                               Dawn

cherish
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2 posted 2001-11-18 05:40 AM


maria,  you wrote sumthing which went straight to the heart. i could feel the overwhelming sense of longing and resignation within this piece. you didnt leave it entirely wanting though. i like how you put in "Someday soon, I'll awake
and that will be me"...it gave some hope to the piece. well done with conveying your emotions in this. i think you did an outstanding job of it. thanks for sharing

       

  

BUM!



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3 posted 2001-11-19 01:50 PM


Yea ree ree...you really arent a useless person and i hope you realize that very very soon!! i liked the poem though, you expressed yourself well..nicely done

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

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