Teen Poetry #5 |
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Ree Ree Member
since 2001-06-28
Posts 56providence, RI |
There's a light up there without a lightbulb and it's feeling useless like me There's a glaring light coming from the hallway and it's fading away like me I'll jut wait, till the day when my heart is free There's a shattered glass shing in the head lights and it's lieing broken like me. There's a shooting star sailing across the sky and oh how i wish that were me There's a great big bird flying inot the sun he's so beautiful and free Someday soon, I'll awake and that will be me There's a dark blue sky without any star light and it's feeling empty like me. There's light up there without a lightbulb and it's feeling useless like me........ [This message has been edited by Ree Ree (edited 11-18-2001).] |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
Ree Ree, I hope you come to realize very soon that you are not a useless person. I will keep my fingers crossed for you that things turn around. Thanks for sharing. Dawn |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
maria, you wrote sumthing which went straight to the heart. i could feel the overwhelming sense of longing and resignation within this piece. you didnt leave it entirely wanting though. i like how you put in "Someday soon, I'll awake and that will be me"...it gave some hope to the piece. well done with conveying your emotions in this. i think you did an outstanding job of it. thanks for sharing |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Yea ree ree...you really arent a useless person and i hope you realize that very very soon!! i liked the poem though, you expressed yourself well..nicely done ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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