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SunShine913

Member

since 2001-08-19

Posts 211
Italy but from NC

0 posted 2001-11-12 10:26 PM

I feel a soft breeze as it caresses my skin
I close my eyes and imagine your breath on my face,
A moment before our lips meet and it is contained,
As two hearts meet and truly touch for the first time.

We explore the sweetness of this first kiss
Breathing in the life’s breath
   that only we can provide for one another...
     edifying and mystifying at the same time...

Time stands still as a lifetime is lived in moments,
Feelings that you have always been here...
And yet, never been here at all.

The newness of this feeling flows over my heart
   even as it is familiar to me
     as though we have always been... together.

Sighing, I open my eyes... only to find
   you have vanished with the breeze.

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~!~ hey you guys i dont know what made me write it but i love it hehe well i hope you enjoyed it.. OOO ya im looking for a different tittle to it i dont like that one .. if you have ideas let me know ~!~

*!~!* Andrea *!~!*

Niksta
New Member

since 2001-11-09

Posts 6
Australia

1 posted 2001-11-13 05:25 AM

I loved your poem! It was really nice to read it, considering a lot of the poems on here are quite sad.
I dont have any ideas about its title, but I really enjoyed it..!
Thanx for the good read =o)

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

2 posted 2001-11-13 09:50 AM

I really liked this poem a lot!! First happy poem i've read from you in a while which is nice to see

I think the title is just fine but i'll try and think of another one for you if your unhappy with this one

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

3 posted 2001-11-13 08:39 PM

"Time stands still as a lifetime is lived in moments,
Feelings that you have always been here...
And yet, never been here at all."

LOVE LOVE LOVE this!! Great write from you!! More!

Skyfire

Member Elite

since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

4 posted 2001-11-13 08:58 PM

"Sighing, I open my eyes... only to find
you have vanished with the breeze."

Wow. Love this one! Well done as usual!!
And no, I will NOT tear it apart!

~I am a computer genius... Hey! How do you turn this thing on?!?

~Love me because I am Rhonda

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

5 posted 2001-11-14 02:07 PM

"A moment before our lips meet and it is contained,
As two hearts meet and truly touch for the first time."

you write so beautifully also emotiosn went well with it all....REALLY well written, throughtout...and hard hitting last lines.

=)

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